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Story: Chasing Your Shadow



Author's profile link: shiningtiara


Review GuideLines:

First Impression (4/5): Though I'm not much of a reader of or yuri (being completely honest), I would like to say that I liked how you concealed your storyline's plot and by revealing interesting quotes from both of the two main characters, Yunho and Jaejoong. To be honest, the first impression would be completely perfect (well, at least from my point of view), if you had rephrased/rearranged the run-on parts of the quotes. *Will be explained later in the Description & Foreword box.

Story Title (5/5):Though I have seen many titles with the words similar to yours, at first glance, the story gives me and idea that whoever was chasing the other person's shadow was like a stalker or secret admirer (lol). It is nice that by finishing the entire story, you link back the connection of your story to your title and draw a complete circle to conclude your story.

Poster/Background Bonus (5/5): I like the current poster of your story because from seeing the graphics (and I love many wonderfully made posters!), it emits off a sort of angst-feel, which is part of what your story is about. Though I did not take notice of the maps and the book before, once I (sort of) finish the story, it also (like your ending) wraps up and makes a full stop that connects all parts of your story together. 

Description & Foreword (6/10): Okay, so I'm a bit picky at grammar, but I'll first start from the visual parts of the description part. From first impression, it looks a bit unattractive (?), because your description needs to stand out a little more to draw the reader's attention. Second, you'll need to rephrase some parts of the sentences.

For example:

Yunho and Jaejoong loves each other they even got married but something happened and Yunho left Jaejoong behind, alone with his son but Jaejoong believes in his true love that if he keeps waiting for him one day...maybe one day he'll meet him again.

To:

Yunho and Jaejoong love each other, that they eventually got married. However, as one accident oc