Chapter 4: The way you write it really good. The way you describe yixing feeling really great, it makes yixing carachter so real, so human. You know what i mean right? It also makes me understand yixing feeling, it must be so hard for him to have live like that. As for luhan, it must be hard for him to have special ability without able to control it, and have no one to understand his ability.
And kai did you see yixing as jerk? Uuuugh... yixing just didnt understand and didnt know how to handle-well i hope you wont turn yixing into bad guy here- all in all i like your story ^^
Chapter 4: I LOVE KAI HERE. He kind of sounds like a bit of a jerk, but like in the best way possible. I loved his narration of what happened with Luhan and Yixing. I also like how he already has such a distinct character and voice from Yixing, great job! SO SAD that I've got up now T_T WILL BE LOOKING FORWARD TO THE NEXT UPDATE WITH MUCH ANTICIPATION! You, dear author, are completely and utterly awesome~
Chapter 3: STILL LOVING IT. Wow, Luhan can be scary though XD The “You sound just like dad did.” line like sent a chill down my spine! If I was Yixing I'd run away to my bedroom too, or no, more like I'd run out of the house period haha Still like Luhan's character though, he's really fascinating so far ^^
Chapter 2: SERIOUSLY LOVING THIS. It's so good! I am really liking the characters so far, they are so interesting and the relationship between Lay and Luhan as brothers is also well...super interesting lol (Can't think of a better word right now, but seriously, it's awesome) And yay for special mysterious powers!
Chapter 1: Wow! This is really good so far! I am completely intrigued ^^ I love stories like this, so very much looking forward to the rest! -immediately goes to read the next chapter-
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