Chapter 23: Love the story! Reminds me of a modern version of Cinderella hehe~.. the story was great however it felt inconsistent. In the beginning, you did a great job in showing who's POV however towards the end, there was no name of who's speaking. Although it was easy to differentiate, it would've been better if the story was consistent.
Chapter 23: You did a good job...don’t get discouraged when people don’t comment...just keep writing because someone is reading and enjoying your work.
Chapter 23: I like your idea about the story but it was a little bit too much fantasy and childish.. So if it was your first story it isn't so bad you can try harder and work on your writing ..but I still like your idea..and the happy ending. Thanks. :)
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