✎ Being Afflicted by RedGuitarist✍ Reviewer: Imyeoniyeoni 

Title (5 /5)  
- Your title is very interesting the moment I saw your request . It encourage everyone to to check out your story to know the meaning of "AFFLICTED" it's indeed a deep word . And from the title itself it 
gives us the feeling of angst in your story . 

Appearance ( 3/5)
- The appearance of your story is plain . Yet I gave you three because you slanted the important 
words in the story . And the whole appearance was neat no distruction in our eyes at all . I like the way 
you made it very simple yet readable . 

Description and Forward (14 /15)
- I like the way you explained the meaning of AFFLICTED because it's a deep and unusual word to use. 
And in your foreword the moment I read it I was already dragged into the angst feeling of the story and it made me more curious about what the story is about . In short your description & foreword makes people want to click "Subscribe", yet you should have put more . 

Plot (27 /30) 
- I love your plot very much it makes me curious about certain things like "What was her dream? 
Why is she in front of her locker then the swimming pool ? Why was her dream always gets cut? " And 
it makes me want to know more about your story .  Your plot is not the usual plot anyone could think of I like the way you made the plot about her "dream" and the curiosity the readers have in it . 

Grammar ( 15/15) 
- Your grammar was very very very good and the words you use are deep words to be honest I need to use google for me to check out the meaning .

Flow ( 8/10) 
- The flow was good though there were many cut parts like 

Opening the door, she stepped into her mother's room, careful not to make the slightest sound. Peering at her mother's sleeping figure, she smiled to herself upon seeing how at ease her mother was. Heading to the bedside table, she placed the tray down and turned to her mother. Giving her a peck on her forehead, Hyun Ji stood up and gave the tray one last look. On it was the usual breakfast she made for her mother - French toast, hard boiled egg and honey lemon tea poured into a thermos - as well as a note that said: 

You should have describe in the story how she got the tray because it was weird when suddenly she already had tray in her hands? 

Also I guess it'll be better if you also made a part where Jin was following Hyun Ji up to the classroom I think It'll be better . 
 

Originality ( 8/10) 
- Many stories are about pain and yours was different yet the common thing here is , Jin is the famous one and Hyun Ji is the loner one . That's very common . 

Enjoyment ( 9/10) 
- My enjoyment when I read the foreword was low until I started to read the story I got hyped up . Im into angst genre and I mostly write stories with this genre . To say that this is my first time to encounter such plot I was really amazed . It inspired me a lot to think more deeper and continue to inspire more angst writters to do so . 

Overal Score (89 /100)

Extra note from Reviewer:  I know it's quite a high score but you deserve it really . I think your disadvantage is the appearance though it's neat . And the flow of your story you want me to focus on was good yet I think you should add more and add POVs if possible . But overall it was a great story to read and I hope you'll update soon & more often because your story is worth to read. ^^ Fighting <3 

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