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Story title: Love Virus

by: growling_girls

Reviewed by: teatee

Title: [3/5]

Comment:

 Title tak eye-catching sebab several fics ada title macam ni.

Apperance: [4/5]

Poster:

Memandangkan poster bukan awak yang buat, saya tak ada komen bahagian itu. Mungkin kalau selitkan element warna-warni sikit supaya cerita ni live.

Background:

Keseluruhan:

Overall, description okay. Saya tak perlu scroll down panjang-panjang nak tengok characters lagi. Karakter Yoori macam girl-next-door pula dan Chanyeol guy yang sweet bagi saya o.O

Vocabulary/Grammar/Tatabahasa: [10/15]

Kat sini saya nak tegas sikit, mungkin lebih elok kalau several dialogue awak macam gini,

"kalau cam tu bak sini handphone kau"kata ku sambil merampas telefon yang dipegang oleh mamat telinga wi-fi ni.

“Kalau cam tu bak sini handphone kau,” kata ku sambil merampas telefon yang dipegang oleh mamat telinga ni.

-Barula macam dialogue sebenar kan?

 

Originality: [7/10]

Saya banyak jumpa fics yang macam ni tapi rupanya mimpi je ke? Nasib Chanyeol tak jerk sangat. I wonder apa peranan Baekhyun dalam story ni? o.O

Flow: [4/5]

Saya tak dapat follow cerita sepenuhnya. Saya confuse part yang Yoori kata ini cuma dreamnya saja dalam chapter 5. So, dari chapter 1-4, semua dream la ek? Saya tak dapat judge sepenuhnya kerana cerita ni hanya permulaan sahaja di mana Chanyeol datang kat sekolah tu sebagai murid baru.

 

Excitement: [3/5]

Saya enjoy juga tengok telatah Yoori. Dia bukan macam perempuan lain.

 Bonus: [3/5]

 

Total: 34/50=68%

My notes:

Sorry jikalau review saya harsh sangat. Harap awak dapat ambil some details dari review saya ni. Jangan risau, orang lain interested dengan cerita awak. Keep up the good work! :)


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JunAra
#1
bile nak bukak ni? sy suka shop ni
darkclov3r #2
Hello.I've made a request for review some time ago. Could you put my requests (title : aku&potret, memori17) on hold/cancel it if you guys haven't start? (either way is fine) I'll be going away for quite some time& will deactivate my acc during that period. I'm sorry.
azure_bliss
#3
Chapter 40: Thank you so much for the review!
I don't mind the lateness at all, it was worth it ^^
Pick-up!
Will credit and edit my mistakes in the story.
Once again, thank you ^^
AiSyah98
#4
Chapter 38: first terkejut,sy tk ingat pun sy hantar req utk yg ni *lol*
oh..thenkiu ^^ esok ade mse sy edit dn credit ^^
DiamondSakura
#5
Chapter 36: hurm,,saya nak britau yang saya dah kreditkan..^^
DiamondSakura
#6
Chapter 36: Thanks for the review..saya tau masih ada yang kurang dalam cerita saya..takpe.nanti saya cuba baiki cara penulisan saya tu.. ^^..maaflah..internet saya tak brape baik..ni pun guna phone..jadi saya kreditkan shop ni agak lambat nanti...sayamintak maaf sangat2 ><
izzyeol #7
Saya nk tnya soalan. Awak awak semua dh tk ambik request untk review ke? Baru eksaited nk mintak korang review kn cerita 。・゚・(ノД`)・゚・。