Chapter 44: the plot is okay, but it could've been so much longer than this. you should've really delved into the angst and stretched it to the maximum. otherwise its fine, and kind of cute
Chapter 47: Wow I loved this story..I love reading EXO mafia au.. Thanks for writing it..I finished this in one day..now off to the sequel.. And will check your other stories too.. <3
Chapter 34: Just wanted to let you know, you probably don't actually mean "inserting a finger into a wet ". is oris which is really just a sensitive spot located above the uretha (where you pee). So there's no place to really insert. The opening you are referring to is the , or whatever other slang you want to use, such as . Also, you used peak as a verb but you probably meant peek.
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