❀A Common Phrase Like I Miss You by creepyweirdo
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TITLE : A COMMON PHRASE LIKE I MISS YOU
AUTHOR : CREEPYWEIRDO | REVIEWER : SAPPHIRE-27
TITLE 5/5
I THOUGHT THE TITLE WAS FITTING AND I DIDN’T FIND ANY REASON TO DISLIKE IT.
DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD 4/5
IT WAS REALLY STRAIGHTFORWARD AND I REALLY LIKED HOW IT’S JUST THAT – IT SEEMS REALLY FITTING TO THE STORY’S SIMPLICITY.
AND IT’S COLLEGE – NOT COLLAGE. ALSO, IT WOULD BE BETTER TO SAY “HALF A PLANET” INSTEAD OF JUST HALF PLANET.
GRAMMAR, SPELLING & PUNCTUATION 8/10
YOU HAVE AWKWARD WORDING SOMETIMES AND PUNCTUATION MISSES (ONLY MISSING COMMAS, NOTHING MAJOR). ALSO, REFRAIN FROM USING THE SAME WORD TOO MUCH. LEARN MORE VOCABULARIES, IT’LL COME IN HANDY WHEN YOU WRITE SO YOU CAN CHANGE THINGS UP INSTEAD OF REPEATING THE SAME THING OVER AND OVER AGAIN.
ENJOYMENT 8/10
CHARACTERIZATION 8/10
I DON’T FIND THE INTERACTIONS BETWEEN THE COUPLE FAR-FETCHED OR TOO MUCH. TAEKOOK ARE YOUNG, JUST BEGINNING TO TACKLE THE WORLD AND HEAD OVER HEELS – I FIND SO MANY PEOPLE ACTING LIKE THIS THAT I THINK IT’S NORMAL.
FOR THE OTHERS, I JUST DON’T SEE MUCH PERSONALITY IN THEM, WHICH MADE ME GIVE YOU A LOW SCORE FOR THIS ONE. I FEEL LIKE THE REST OF BANGTAN COULD EASILY JUST BE COMPACTED INTO TWO IDENTICAL PEOPLE.
PLOT/FLOW/ORIGINALITY 8/10
THE STORY WAS PLAIN – I SUGGEST TO JUST CRAM THE WHOLE THING INTO A ONESHOT RATHER THAN CHAPTERING IT. CHAPTERING STORIES REQUIRE MORE CONFLICT TO ADD TO IT SO IT WOULDN’T BE BLAND.
OVERALL SCORE 8.5/10
IT WAS A PRETTY SOLID FANFIC, DISREGARDING ITS PLAIN FACTOR (BUT I PREFER IT THIS WAY RATHER THAN YOU MAKING UP DRAMATIC THINGS JUST TO HAVE A CONFLICT). THANKS FOR REQUESTING! (AND I REALLY LIKE YOUR NAME)
CREEPYWEIRDO
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SAPPHIRE-27
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