A Merman's Tears

Description

There are legends of creatures that share our physical appearnces. They ae odd, and there are stories of love and fantasy, but that is not the legend that prevails. They are creatures of war and hatred, so all our creatures are warned against them. They have no fins and live in the dry land. Thy kill us and munt us our trophies, so why would anyone want to befriend a...human? 

Why would anyone fall in love with one?

 


Inspired by "Baby, Don't Cry" by EXO

Foreword

When I broke through, I saw blue. It was such a lighter blue than what I have seen, and when I looked around, I saw…something. I don’t know what it’s called, but there were stories that my father told me when I was younger of a place called land. I think that’s what it was. It was beautiful. It was green and had so much sand, and it looked so peaceful. There was something white in the distance, but I couldn’t tell what it was, so I swam around as I got closer.

It was a palace. It was like my father’s, but it looked so elegant. Ours was colorful, but this one was white and a strange yellow color. It kind of looked darker, like the yellow that glowed from the lava. It looked so strange, yet so beautiful.

“Hahahaha.” I heard a laugh and I switched my gaze towards the left. I saw a mess of black hair and light brown skin. I dove under the water again and headed to some rock off the edge. I don’t know why, but I felt that I needed to hide. I peered around the large rocks that I was able to hide behind to see what I had hidden from. 

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minhyun #1
Chapter 6: Please update . I love all of your writing . Hope you're not abandon this storyy . =)
nanunnie #2
Chapter 6: You should update. Don't abandon this story please?
Bunnyfox
#3
Chapter 6: I'm liking this story! I hope to see more chapters in the future because it is interesting and different :).
LoveLyJonghyunieL
#4
Chapter 6: I am relly love this story..its do different and really awesome..i hope you will update soon..
Luhan_TaoKris
#5
Chapter 6: Hahahah,i laugh alot when i read how Chunji taught niel about how to use the toilet!!!
Niel is really funny here especially when he touched his 'thing' hahahaha
And so cute when he sleep with the dog~ <3
Wishinglights #6
Chapter 6: Lol when I noticed you updated I was excited! And then when I started reading this chapter I just scared myself by laughing so loud! Lol and I thank you for that for as I have not laughed like that in a long time! I really enjoyed this chapter, it was very funny!
belinha1045 #7
Chapter 6: Hahaha xD
Can't wait to see the next chapter^^
Luhan_TaoKris
#8
Chapter 5: update again,author-nim!!!!
i love how changjo washing Niel <3
it was seriously sweet and fluffy^^
sleeproutine #9
Chapter 5: Oh, wow. This is unexpected (in more ways than one), but not unwelcome! I think it's very interesting how you've chosen to reveal Jonghyun's personality through his actions in this chapter. We (your readers) already know from Daniel's observations that Jonghyun is considerate and kind, but here I feel that you've shown us his more erse side, and that's not a bad thing. It makes me curious about what Jonghyun's long-term plans are for Niel, and whether or not Niel will start reacting more expressively to him -- That's one small critique I do feel the need to mention. Despite this story being told in first person, and from Niel's point of view, I feel like we're shut out from his more immediate thoughts and feelings. He seems like he's trying very hard to keep his narration factual and free of any impurity or more critical thinking. This does give his character a certain degree of innocence, which is probably what you're going for, but I would also like to read Niel as being more aware of his body (and Jonghyun's body!!), now that it's changed so drastically and is now suddenly being given such close...attention.

I'm also curious about Minsoo, of course. I hope that you do continue writing this story. It's interesting without a doubt, and I know that you have a knack for taking popular premises and fleshing them out into an entirely different kind of story.

*whispers* this is kuleah@tumblr, btw. I thought I would finally start commenting on your stuff since you so greatly deserve it.