Chapter 2: Awwww..IT WAS SUPER REALLY REALLY GOOD BUT THE ENDING-OH MY LORD THE ENDING MADE ME WANT TO SCREAM "SEKAI SEKAI SEKAI...." AND PULL MY HAIR OUT I SWEAR. I sososososososo want a sequel of what happens like maybe 5 years later OH MY-that would be so amazing wow I would love you forever your style of writing is beautiful and I'm blown away hELp

Chapter 2: .................. I'm actually happy that you chose this ending. I predicted it pretty well... after he said "Don't be like me" even though it was mid-way everything clicked in my mind. I was spazzing to see if I was right and dying when I find that I was. D: Why must I read carefully? I basically spoiled the ending for me... yet you wrote it so beautifully that many times during the story I would be pondering if what I predicted was true. Then at times I would forget that I already knew the ending (Well I thought I knew) and would be so engulfed and the end was so perfect. It couldn't have been written better.

EXCUSE ME SWEETHEART

WHICH PART OF THE FIC WAS INSPIRED BY SOMEONE ELSE

YOU TOTALLY WROTE BETTER THAN ME

KYAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH I AM SERIOUS ABOUT THAT THIS IS GOODDDD ALTHOUGH I AM SORRY I WANT TO CRY AT THE SULAY BECAUSE KRISHO FOREVER FOR ME B-BUT ;;;;; YOU ARE SO GOOD I FEEL SO WORTHLESS

SOBS

PARDON THE CAPS LOCK

I LOVE YOU

Chapter 2: anjinggggggggggg

Chapter 2: This was so good! I'm sad that Hunhan didn't end up together, but its so sweet of Luhan to try to leave Sehun for Jongin. To bad neither Sehun nor Jongin will ever know. Luhan will just suffer knowing he lost his two best friends due to something not his fault and Jongin and Sehun will hate him even though they don't know the truth.

Chapter 2: Very interesting how this ended! I specifically liked how what was said at the beginning was brought back at the end, just to wrap things up and explain why it went from three as one to three as three. The story was simple, but it attracted the reader to read on to find out what will happen and who will end up with who. Very good job at that.

It was well written, smooth and easy to follow. When you write in small paragraphs, pieces of moments highlighted just to make it more dramatic and angst, the advantage is that it triggers emotion more than long paragraphs with nothing but text. However, do be reminded that when you make them too short, the characters will start to lose content. For me, it was especially the case with Kai, which I consider a main character here too. For me, he was too much in the background, not granted too much time to shine to really show what his character was. When you focus on the feelings, on the thoughts that rush through the characters' heads, you really have to put them on paper in order to really attract your readers. I'm assuming now that Luhan loved Sehun all this time, and that's why he wanted to find someone else so dearly. You could've highlighted this more, giving hints between words, which would've triggered more emotions. Although supposedly Luhan was oblivious, it would be nicer if you already hinted in the story that he wasn't, and then clearly reveal it in the end. Now it's more like a twist in the end just to make things less pretty.

That doesn't take away that I do like this piece. I just like giving some feedback. I found small grammar errors sometimes, but other than that, it was well written. One more thing, I wonder whether it might be a better thing to do to use less dialogues with these stories. Less dialogues and more focus on the characters. Well, I'll stop talking now, since I seem to sound so mean haha, but thank oyuf or sharing this lovely piece!

Chapter 2: I loved it~
Although I'm a hunhan shipper, I was pushing for sekai.