Chapter 10: Can I being honest here? I think you needs to improve somethings here author-nim..
I realize that your story had a lot of conversation but it's almost no narration. Also, I suggest you to use the adverb of time/place in order to prevent any confusing part of your story. Also about the part when Kai give Yoojin a puppy, I think its a lot better if you narrate it like 'I felt the box is moving in my grip, like there's something alive inside that box... Curious, I open up the box and a cutie living suddenly greets me with its beautiful eyes' before you add the conversation. And the line saids : "But I love that name, oppa gomawo." Its sounds weird, after all it was the puppy name, not her. So she should said : "But that name sounds good too... I'd love to call this puppy by that name..."
The story is quite good, you just need to improve your writting skill and you'll become a great author....
That's all... I'm sorry if I take too much space and maybe also waste your precious time on reading my comments. Hope my comments were useful enough for you... *bow nd smiles*
Chapter 10: no it's not boring author.. i like this story to be honest.. i love the way kai is being fluffy with yoojin *i love fluffy things* xD
finally kai confessed his feeling to yoojin..
keep updating author.. Fighting :)
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