Title [5/5]: although a tad bit cliche, this title definitely informs readers of what to expect, the relation to the story is unmistakable.

Appearance [10/10]: I personally liked the graphics used, the paint swishes upon both Sunny's and Hoya's face reflect the persona they put on for the public and perhaps even represent the flaws they possess. Plus, the poster is very pretty.

Description/Foreword [17/20]: since it's a two shot, it explains why there was such a large chunk of the overall story written in the Description; however if you intend to write longer fanfiction, I suggest not revealing so much about the protagonists' (main characters) in the beginning. Personally, I prefer indirect characterization, but revealing a bit of the character's personality in the Description/Foreword isn't an issue. 

Characterization [6/10]: your characterization of both Hoya and Sunny were overall, very well done. Despite that Sunny seemed like that cliche 'queenka' of the school, it was understandable when she explained herself at the last chapter in the company of Hoya. However Hoya on the other hand...let's just say that you started out strong with the 'cold' attitude and portrayed him rather well up until the last chapter where you kind of act out of character.

"Sunny stared at him in disbelief..."

This is where is starts off on chapter three, where Sunny and Hoya are both having that serious but enlightening conversation with each other, but I feel like the fact that Hoya exclaimed he was so alike to Sunny and practically giggled threw off the whole brusque feel you successfully kept intact up until then. Try sticking to the character next time, instead of having him giggle, have the him shake his head. Example:

Sunny stared at him in disbelief, "I can't believe you!" 

"S-sorry..." Hoya lowly chuckled, shaking his head incredulously. "I just never would have thought we'd have so much in common."

This way, Hoya doesn't seem like he's a completely changed character from cold and an outcast, to sociable and cute so quickly. I understand it's a two shot and stories in those types of genres are supposed to happen fast, but this is just a suggestion offered to you, you don't have to follow it.

plot [14/25]: don't take this as a bad thing. it's merely because the story you wrote was a two shot, but perhaps if you plan another two shot, something other than two people meeting with similar personas would be more interesting. Be creative~

Grammar [20/25]: I managed to only spot a few grammatical mistakes and typographical errors, but other than that, for a non native English author, your writing wasn't bad at all. Simple and easy to read. Good job ^^

Flow [4/5]: it's not a perfect score, simply because the last chapter, the last conversation with Sunny and Hoya seemed a bit too fast. Try pacing yourself with writing, especially when they involved those epiphany moments or moments of enlightenment, when you get to the heart of the story.

Pace [8/10]: see comments on 'Flow' above.

Enjoyment [7/10]: personally, I did enjoy the two shot. Again, it was simple, easy to read and had a meaningful moral at the end which I could relate to. However, I don't like docile demure female main characters, but fortunately I'm unbiased so I gave a decent score for your story.

Moral [5/5]: excellent moral. life lesson to be learned by us all.

Grade: [95/120 + 5 points extra credit]

review done by Jae_Ree

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