✩ Title; ( 5 / 5 )

I like your title. Whenever the word 'heartfelt' is brought up I automatically think of something dramatic and sad at the same time. From what I see that is where you are going with the story. I do think that the title may be too angsty for many of the readers on this site because most of them love fluffy stories.

✰ Foreword & Description; ( 9 / 10 )

Your forward and decricption were written very well. It says enough to interest a reader without giving away too much of the story. It gives off a grungy feeling. This feeling completly condratics the idea of her wanting someone or something. Although the decription section is very short, you find a way to pull the reader in with one sentence. Many people don't have that ability and for that I congradulate you. The only problem I have is that the decription and forward contridict each other a bit so I must dock you a point.

✰ Characterization; ( 9 / 10 )

The characterization of the voice is very well done. Your writing depicts the voice as a real person, not only that but as a person in love. You show his jealousy and anger perfectly so even the reader gets chills (or at least I did...). The way you describe Jiyeon, in the first 6 chapters, is a little unclear to me; I was not sure if she was  going to be a strong and confident girl or a shy and weak girl. The voice is a good describer of the characters who we know nothing about such as Yoona and Myungsoo.

✰ Originality; ( 15 / 15 )

I wanted to give you a bonus point on this but I couldn't.  This is completely unique story. I have never seen a  show or read a story like this. The way you plotted everything and organized it was just perfect. You have earned 15 out of 15 for your great imagination.

✰ Plot; (  15 / 15 )

As I have said before, plot and originality go together. Your plot is very creative and is executed very well. I must say I have no clue where the story is going. As a very easily distracted reader I love the mystery and the wait for the newest chapter. The plot of the story is spread out well over the chapters.

✰ Spelling & Grammar; ( 9.5 / 10 )

Through out the seven chapters there were very little grammar mistakes. The were only one or two, I'm sure if you reread through your story you will see them, but you must read it carefully otherwise you will miss it. If you would like to know where the mistakes were just tell me.

✰ Story's Flow;  ( 10 / 10 )

Your story is easy to follow and doesn't confuse the reader. I was able to read the story in one night without getting bored or overwhelmed with drama. So far I don't know how dramatic it will get but right now it is perfect for the beginning of a great story. You chapter endings leave the reader on edge until the next update and that is something great in an author. 

✰ Overall Enjoyment; ( 10 / 10 )

This was another section where I would love to give you a bonus point but sadly I am not able to. I really enjoyed reading this, from the appealing entry to the cliffhanger at the end of chapter seven. This was really well written and that is the type of story I like to read.

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Over All Score; 

                             83.5 / 85! 
                                 
                                  98%

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   A Note From, 

                        Princesselena

  Dear GreenGardenPop

 I think you did an amazing job. This story is
 just awesome! I hope you keep on updating,
 so I can read more and more. If I say anything
 else you would think all I could do is praise you.
 Fighting!                   

                            -Princesselena