Chapter 1: yaaaaaaaaahhhhhhh jinjja... it'll be awwsome if they date tough..

Chapter 1: ooommmmoooo!!! so sweet! i like it i like it i like it! so cute ^^

Chapter 1: Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!! So sweet :))))

Chapter 1: That was awesome ! I can't imagine Yang Yoseob being a teacher . Anyway , I loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee it !!! :D

Chapter 1: Well, I suppose I should honestly admit that love at first sight strikes as an uncanny idea to me. It's not that it cannot be used, but I think your story is too quick. I understand it is a oneshot, but yea...

If you don't mind listening to suggestions and opinions - not criticism, alright? - then continue reading this lengthy comment of mine.

Firstly, you do have odd spelling errors. Words such as (sence), (gorgeouse) and (responce). Admittedly, the words should have been (since), (gorgeous) and (response).

Next, I'm not too sure on how to give this an apparent name or title, so just allow me to mention that in some sentences, you seem to phrase it awkwardly or miss out a few words. For example, in the sentence (Her mother had insisted she be early on the first day of school,), it would probably flow better if you added the words (that) after the word (insisted) and the word (should) after the word (she). Therefore, it becomes like (Her mother had insisted that she should be early on the first day of school,).

Lastly, this is truly a mere suggestion. I realized that you use a lot of commas in one sentence. I suppose it would look more presentable if you try to use semicolons. A comma (,) indicates a brief pause, whereas a semicolon (;) doesn't have one. It works almost like a punctuation mark (.) but not so as well. I don't intend to confuse you, but this symbol can be useful at times.

All in all, I just want to give you my honest opinion. I don't intend to discourage or criticize. If I made you feel disheartened, I am truly sorry.

Have a nice day. ^^/