Chapter 1: The girl's character is not elaborated that much. She's a bit blurry to me so I find it hard to see her. Nevertheless this is a nice story :D Thanks for the story

Chapter 1: whoa loved this writing style!! you should have more writers blocks x3
its the style i look for, but so few people actually write like this
even though its a one shot, you've made the characters so strong, it gives off the multichaptered fic vibe.
keep writing like this! (do try~ ;_;)
loved it! <3

Chapter 1: Ahhhh this was such a pleasure. Kai, your senses are just phenomenal~
And hahaha, Sehun, always Jongin's partner in crime~
Loved this writing style! It had a lot of character.
Keep up the great work!

Chapter 1: Okay. So Kai may not be my bias, but damn! Your characterization was done really well, and it feels as if I actually do know Kai. (but oh well, reality's a ____, i will never ever get to truly meet him and be his friend whatsoevaaah .____.)
The girl... you should have described her a little more, but i can tell she is so god damn weak and I abhor weak people. So. she's not exactly the type of character, never mind main character, I like to see. Aha. Thank god the focus of the story is on Jongin.
I liked his nonchalant attitude in this, and I kinda think it suits him well. His brotherhood with Sehun too is absolutely.. >.> <.< I dunno how to describe it, but I love their brotherhood anyways. It's nice seeing how he changes from a person who doesn't give a ____ to a person who cares too much when something happens to the main girl. It might not be love (in my case it's undefined) but that girl must have had took up so much of his attention, that he liked her that much, to have displayed an abnormal change in his usual demeanor.
I can see that you have a pretty extensive range of vocabulary, too. That's nice. ;) I'm always in for adding new words to my personal dictionary.
Anyway, overall, I enjoyed this one-shot thoroughly. Keep on writing and good luck ;) Good job ^^

Chapter 1: omg!! ur writing! its magic!! <3

Chapter 1: Okay, first of all love how you deviated from your usual to something, as I said, avant garde. I like how it is in present perfect. It's been a long time since I have read any present perfect stories leaving Jane Eyre of course :P
Coming to the characters, oh my cold cold Kai let me put you in a furnace so that you may turn into the hot, beast I so desire *_*
XD I really like him (when do I not -_- ) But I really like how you portrayed him. As for the female, I am on the border of detesting her. Really did not like her character at all. But Kai's beauty was far too overwhelming for me to notice her.
P.S. you have got some fans down there XD
P.P.S- sehun and Kai are the perfect brotherhood!

Chapter 1: This is so sweet. I like the flow of the entire story and all of Kai's thoughts and feelings towards her. The ending was lovely and I couldn't help but smile :D

Chapter 1: Okay let me tell you something woman. You are very talented. See that right there? That is pure and beautiful fluff. Not the kind where people are gushing and saying stuff they don't mean. But when someone goes out of their way to protect someone else. When you gravitate towards somebody. That is love. Not teenagers going "omaiboyfriend/girlfriend!"

i LOVE YOU FOR THAT UNNIE. That was brilliance. I can't begin to describe how beautiful that was.

Imma go cry

Peace out, yo.

Chapter 1: ehh...sweet...!! I like it...!!!
nice..sweet and beautiful

I really like this^^ I love how you describe kai's character and the way he thinks. It's really beautiful c: /hugs u for life.