Chapter 2: OMG you my friend are AMAZING!!!!!! i love this it's poetic almost..... almost like a .... a..... what are they called again? Aigoo.... i can't remember but the fantasy the tragic ending (not tragic but still a bit sad) This story is a work of art a truly moving piece of art. You have skills and i'm not just saying that. I write a lot but i haven't posted yet and to say the least I'm a bit... how do i say..... EGOCENTRIC!-.- yup egocentric so I really envy you... IN A GOOD WAY!!! Write me some more Unni!!

-Your envious Dongsaeng LittlePanda1717

Chapter 2: I really like the edited version♥

Chapter 2: The end is were you introduce a tiny bit of fantasy again, but it blends beautifully with the story, so much so that the idea could just as easily be real as it is surreal. Key giving him that note, which tells the reader that maybe the feelings are mutual. That maybe if we had seen Kibum's thoughts, we'd see the story of the 'boy at the table, who always follows my reading selections.' It's so romantic while still being timid and it just fits so well. The end is out final taste of who Kibum is and it's oh so very sweet. In his own awkward, nerdy way he's a surprisingly romantic person. It works so well with how he is when he reads. He's expressive, but only to himself. Him giving Jjong the note in the book is a way of opening himself up and allowing someone else in because they share something so personal, reading.

Chapter 2: I fall in love with this story each time I read it and it's certainly a testament to your linguistic choices and the perfection of the idea you had. The pacing is great, with shorter sentences at the beginning and the end and meaty paragraphs in the guts/center of the story. But I think what stands out to me most, is just how in amazing the characters are.

I think what makes this story so unique and such a stand-out is because it's a more realistic romance that still seems so out-of-this-world. Jonghyun is not some outgoing jock or self-absorbed lover boy, he's an awkward student in the middle of some random city and he's nervous and quiet. His character is so relatable. You're able to make him into a realistic character without taking away from his personality. The libraries not a refuge for him, but it is a place were he feels comfort. He's not overly angsty or self-absorbed, he just loves the beautiful sound of reading.

I think my favorite part of the story though is what you were able to do with Key. He is a silent character and so that really isolates him and considering the reader doesn't get his perspective at all, it would be very easy for him to become a caricature of pixxy romance then a rounded person. But it's in Jjong's descriptions that we really discover and fall in love with Key. The reader doesn't require brash actions or big romantic gestures to prove what he feels is genuine. Instead we find Kibum ever more tantalizing and desirable as we get to know him through his interests and what makes him feel. Jjong makes an effort to say that Key is plain, and I think this is a good thing. If he were to find Kibum instantly attractive, especially in a ual way, it may have given earlier and easier satisfaction to himself and the reader, but it would have detracted from him slowly falling for the boy in the windowsill. There is a reason that the slow process is so significant; he's not attracted to a body, he's attracted to a beautiful personality.

Chapter 2: i've been putting this off for way too long, so now i feel like i owe you a long and meaningful comment. the tl:dr, I LOVE IT SO MUCH!! you can tell that your writing has gotten better since the first version, there's a lot more of your own stylistic features in there without disrupting the flow of the story. I really like the quotes you included (lol the hunger games xD i never even realised there was such a nice line in there!) I am still in love with that circular kind of thing, where you begin and end on a similar phrases and it's always just wonderful to read your stuff :) I haven't had a lot of jongkey feels lately, so you've more than fulfilled my ship-ly allotment of cute with this fic :D Keep up the good work and I hope to read more of your writing soon ^^

Chapter 2: Omg I can definitely tell that there was improvement in the edited version. I love the whole thing. And the quotes you used were wonderful! I love both of those books. Great job! You should show Jongkey to your creative writing class more often hehe. It seems to really help improve your writing ^^

Chapter 2: Its really well written. And adorable :)

Chapter 2: Oh gosh my heart just left my body <3 This was so good, so beautiful and urgh just perfect <3

Chapter 2: This was simply beautiful.........<33
I just don't know what else to say just ...... :)