The Servant

Description

Jaehun looks like any other sophmore in one of Seoul's many highschools. His life was perfect, he is the top of his class, a lot of friends, and even has a girlfriend. He never thought it would come to a crashing end when his past comes back to haunt him. Now he must either fight or fly, to not only save his life, but perhaps many others.

Characters:

Lee Jaehun

 

Very passive, but will blow up like a volcano if agitated. 

Used to be somewhat of a womanizer/player until he met his girlfriend.

Jung HyunJoo

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Really stubborn.

Independent.

Plays the piano very well.

Beast/B2st:

Dongwoon

Yoseob

Kikwang

Junhyung

Doojoon

Hyunseung

All charismatic and players of their school, Hang Lee public school. The school thinks that they're just a group of friends, which they somewhat are, but they have their own secrets.

Mblaq:

Lee Joon

Seungho

Thunder

G.O.

Mir

They're the top boss at their school, Shin Hwan academy. The academy is the rival to Hang Lee.

 

 

Foreword

This story will hopefully be more like an actual story then my first one.... Leave comments please!!!! I'm trying this out to help me with my writing skills cuz right now, English is my worst subject. I'll try and update this every Wednesday if I can. But then again, I'm taking like all AP classes this year, so thats not set in stone.

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shin-oppa #1
Chapter 3: I actually think the story would have been awesome if not for the rushed writing and rushed atmosphere. It’s like you’re trying to get to the most important part as fast as possible, ignoring character development. Because of that, I don’t see anything special in terms of character, not even the loose attitude of the school staff (the Korean system can be demonic) or how the main character interacts with his surroundings.

Then again, the plot is attractive – some high-school kid with a secret? Well, I’m in! Despite the rebellious cliché he’s portrayed with, it might end up being more than that. I’m also curious what’s with all the bullying and everything, it seems a bit farfetched. I do say Lee Joon already looks daring, but that’s maybe because of the cliffhanger ^^ Wonder what his deal shall be.

Keep writing! Just remember to take your time and double-check everything before adding a new chapter. If you’re having a difficult time with placing your ideas in order, just write them down so you can see them better and trace the appropriate line the plot should follow.

Oh, and belated happy birthday! Hope you’ll have another amazing year :)
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