A Bleak Winter

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This is an entry for Outside the Box Writing Contest.

Theme for Box 1: Winter

 

What could possibly go wrong in pure white snow?

 

 

 

 

Poster done by chagimadu @ CHAGIMADU & FRIENDS GRAPHIC REQUEST SHOP 

 

 

Foreword

I entered this contest because I had something to write. Lol.

I would leave the female lead as someone anonymous.

 

Well then, to whoever that's reading this, please enjoy! 

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babymichiie #1
Chapter 1: Wow, it's simple yet beautifully written. Not bad! :)
Nesnesa #2
Chapter 1: this is beautiful :DDDDDDD i love just how you end this^^
wishonastarrynight #3
Chapter 1: This story is an interesting one. I'm glad that you left the character open to the reader's imagination.

I thought the imagery was great. This was just a story to show the image of winter like the competition asks for, wasn't it? Well, if so, then I really enjoyed it.

However, the main thing that kind of put me off with this was the sentence variety. You overused the word "she" wayyyy too much. To keep the anonymous aspect, you could search up different ways to say "she" and alternate them. Almost every sentence had that word, and it becomes repetitive and redundant. Aside from that, it was okay. So I guess it wasn't sentence variety but it was the word choice.

I hope you understand though ^^; I really liked this, and I enjoyed the fact that it was against what most people will put. So good luck on the competition and I hope that you do well~
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