We've been through so much

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Minho and I have been together for 3 years. In my first year, I was bullied by the school's queenka, Kwon Yuri. I remember running out of the classroom, hearing snickers behind me. I just ran to the school's rose garden… and that was where I met him.

Choi Minho.

 He seemed to be a quiet and shy guy, but as our friendship started to grow, I found out that he was a very charismatic type of guy.

Soon, I started to grow feelings for him, I started to notice it after I heard him sing. He had one of those voices that could scare you when he's mad, but makes your heart melt when he's actually singing.

Finally, in our second year, he asked me if I could be his girlfriend. Of course, I said yes. During that time I felt like nothing could go wrong.

But don't think too soon. You'll surely break if you're wrong.

Then, that heart-breaking moment in our last year had to come along. No, he didn't break up with me.

Worse, he cheated.

Author: shineelovah4evah

Story: We've been through so much  {[ 

Genre:  romance, drama, a bit of comedy

Features: SHINee, SNSD, Super Junior , OC

Review:

Description:

Very interesting! I definitely wanted to keep scrolling and read what else was posted on that first page. It teased enough to get the reader to want to go to the next chapter and read about this common topic. It isn't too long and doesn't give too much away, definitely a good start.

5/5

Grammar:

So far from what I've read, which is just the first 2 chapters, there are little to no grammar problems.

"I finally moved, bent down, and threw my..." I'm not sure how to fix this one, but the whole "moved, bent down, and threw..." part just...sounds weird. It's awkward.  

When you have things like flash backs, POV change's, scene changes ect put it like this:  "- Minho's POV-" To differentiate this from the rest of writing. 

Other then that, everything else is really good. I'd suggest adding in a little more description though.

5/5

Story Line/ Plot: It is very interesting! I wanted to continue reading, but I told myself I'd get this review done. Everything flows nicely and it kept my attention which is a good sign since I have the attention span of a hampster.
 The dialog is well written and I can't wait to read the rest of it. You are a good author!

10/10

Total: 20/20

Rating: Blue

 

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