Non-ending Dialouge.
Fanfiction Pet Peeves (Tips & How-to's)Rant/Tip #006
Okay. Now everyone has seen a fanfic where there's no seperate paragraphs, right?
Example:
"Yixing oppa! You didn't buy me my ice cream!" Sun Mi complained as she pouted. The unicorn chuckled, "Sorry, I forgot. Can I come in?" he patted her head. "Neh, oppa! Come in! I'm not doing anything anyway." She moved back a bit so her friend could enter her apartment unit. "You were watching To the Beautiful You?" he asked. Sun Mi nodded, "Yep! The new episode! Do you want to watch it with me?" Lay smiled, "Sure. Let's watch it together." they both ended up watching the first episode of the brand new drama together. "Oppa, isn't that you?" she pointed at one of the characters. "No, he just looks like me." he answered as he shoved popcorn in , "Now chew."
Like.. that is so freaking annoying! You're submitting your work to AsianFanFics. Not to some IM page or on freaking FaceBook.
My Reaction:
Stories like that make me angry! Like I want to stab someone! (not you yixing, or any of our subscribers, you guise are awesome~ and you too mooncake)
How it should be:
"Yixing oppa! You didn't buy me my ice cream!" Sun Mi complained as she pouted.
The unicorn chuckled, "Sorry, I forgot. Can I come in?" he patted her head.
"Neh, oppa! Come in! I'm not doing anything anyway." She moved back a bit so her friend could enter her apartment unit.
"You were watching To the Beautiful You?" he asked. Sun Mi nodded, "Yep! The new episode! Do you want to watch it with me?"
Lay smiled, "Sure. Let's watch it together." they both ended up watching the first episode of the brand new drama together. "Oppa, isn't that you?" she pointed at one of the characters.
"No, he just looks like me." he answered as he shoved popcorn in , "Now chew."
Much better~
bye guys! - rachelonewchicken (yixing's wife, rachel).
-off to bed. long day ahead of me tomorrow. if there's any submissions, mooncake can take care of it! :D have a nice day, night, afternoon. wherever you live, have fun!
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