Gil Da Ran visits Kang Kyung Joon

Description

Just a one-shot of Gil Da Ran and Kang Kyung Joon. I don't know if it might seem OOC to you, but that will be your opinion. And also, please be aware that this is my very first fanfiction, ever. It took me a lot of courage to have this posted. Anyways, thanks and enjoy!

Foreword

There really isn't a foreword to this story.

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charmallama #1 Jul 20, 2012 01:54:18

This was a really good story ^___^ would you mind if I offered some constructive criticism? The plot was a little confusing so I had to read it a few times over to get what had really happened so maybe post a debrief, just to aid your readers? You have excellent grammar and writing skills WHICH IS THE DEAL MAKER for me :D Work on characterisation a little more, (since you wrote a one-shot I suggest making every little detail, even dialogue symbolic of a certain idea) of some significance to your story. Sorry for being so bothersome tho.. :( Pls keep up the good work and I look forward to your next fics :)