Review: I Swear... So Stay With Me

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Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/16645/i-swear-so-stay-with-me-donghae-haesica-heechul-jessicajung-snsd-suju-yoona

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I Swear... So Stay With Me

Reviewer: awesomegurl4815

Title 6/10: Well, I just LOVE your title. It's strange and cute. The reason I gave you a six is because it doesn't really suit your story. I think you can go with something better.

Poster/Background 8/10: Well, I just adore your poster/background. It is so cute! No offence to the poster maker but they could have made your main characters the biggest one in your poster. Also, may I ask why Hara is in the poster even though she only showed up once in the story?

Writing Errors/Grammar 9/10: Well, your grammar is fine. I didn't see any mistakes in it. For the writing errors, I saw a comma missing when you needed it and you forgot some spaces and accidently put unnessisary spaces. Otherwise, good job.

Enjoyment 10/10: I enjoyed your story a lot. I especially love the part when HaeSica was skating together and TaeTeuk was admiring them until they fell. I just cracked up during that part!

Writing Styles 9/10: Well, I'm so happy that you didn't you the script style for writing. I think you could have used more color to make the story pop out though.

Bonus 10/10: I don't really do this part.

Total: 97/100

　

Reviewer's Comment: I was so happy when you asked me to do your review! I love your story! I've read it before but then I kind of stopped reading it for an unknown reason. So far, you are the first person who asked me to request a story that I already read. I had a hard time doing your total scores. I did my usual technique of adding the total for a review and your review's score kept going over to the 100's! To me, you need to have all ten out of ten to get 100 so I just ended up giving you the score that I thought would be right. Sorry if I sounded mean in any way! I can't wait to read your work in the future! Also,

PLEASE UPDATE SOON! 

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Topu-Da #1
Username: topumasum

Story Title: Blessing of the daughter

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/331320/blessing-of-the-daughter-shot-jaejoong-junsu-supernatural-yoochun-neil

Characters: Neil(OC) and park Yoochun

Pictures:http://news.sabay.com.kh/wp-content/uploads/2011/04/yuchun-jyj.jpg

http://sphotos-d.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash4/315699_10151197723511225_782887237_n.jpg







Quotes: nothing

Who Do You Want To Do The Request: i dont know anyone here thus whoever is the best here and can make this poster in brwon and black or in the background the girl is in.

Extra Info: as i mentioned to adjust both of these pics use the girl's pic background to blend. dont change yoochun's pic
flyingyen #2
Hey there! Sorry to be leaving a message like this in your comments but Ravenous Temptations are hiring for more staff! We are looking for dedicated graphic designers, reviewers, writers and advertisers! So please help us out because we are overloaded with requests and lack the staff to complete them ^^;;<br />
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http://ravenous-temptations.blogspot.com
awesomegurl4815 #3
To all of the people who requested,<br />
Sorry for taking forever on the one-shots! I need to find new employees, update my other fanfics, tutor my annoying cousin, and advertize the shop for more popularity. Not to mention, I am having writer's block right now and trust me, it's really blocked up. I'm trying my best to finish all of them in a few weeks. So please be patient and still support me.<br />
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Also, I'm looking for two one-shot writers and an advertiser(?). Can someone help me out? Can someone recommend the shop on their story or blog or whatever? If so, please contact me on my wall privately.<br />
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P.S. So I'm reading this story and I think it's a really good role-model-story-thingy to look up to. It's called My Two Best Friends by Ducky-Chuu. It's about IU, Wooyoung, and Sunggyu. Hope you check it out!<br />
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P.P.S. If you don't read the status above on the forewords page, you wouldn't know about what's going on. I would highly suggest reading it because it's pretty important. And, I'm adding another status list thingy but this time,, it's for the requesting stuff so seriously, check out the forewords.
firebirdchild #4
hello~! if you havent started on my oneshot already, can i cancel please? thank you <3 sorry for the inconvenience > < if youve started on it already then nevermind!! :)
_fairytale-- #5
And... Oh yeah.. You asked me why Hara was on the poster when she only showed up once. Well because later she will be showing up more often. ^^
_fairytale-- #6
Oh~ Thanks for the review... I'm so glad you like it.. And I was surprised that you read it already. Nothing you said was harsh. Everything you said made me smile. ^-^ I'll keep updating. Hwaiting.
firebirdchild #7
im terrified of the blacklist- it looks so scary!! D:<br />
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Username: firebirdchild<br />
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Pairing: Moon Ineo (O.C.), Yang Yoseob (Beast)<br />
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Characters: Moon Ineo, Yang Yoseob<br />
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Plot: up to you :))<br />
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Theme: fluff, fluff, fluff! and some sadness~ LOL<br />
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Extra Info: Ineo is from America. She is caucasian but speaks a little Korean. She goes to the same school as Yoseob. <br />
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thank you!! <33
blue_toast #8
“ I don’t know , maybe all the food I ate went straight to my hands and it become heavy ? ~ROTFL
SweetPoison #9
Username: SweetPoison<br />
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Pairing: Lee Jin kyung (OC) Junhyung (Beast)<br />
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Characters: BEAST<br />
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Plot: Junhyung is a possessive guy and often accuses his Girlfriend (Jin Kyung) if she is having affairs with her guy friends (Beast). But then one time Jin Kyung have had enough of Junhyung possessiveness and even thought of breaking up with Junhyung but then when Jin Kyung came to see him; Junhyung changed all of a sudden he said that Jin kyung should hang out with her friends more often. At first it made Jin kyung happy but then she realized that she felt "Unloved" by Junhyung. I'll leave the ending up to you.:)<br />
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Theme (cute, sad, funny, etc.): Sort of sad. But I want the ending to be a happy one.:)<br />
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Extra Info: Jin Kyung and Junhyung lives together. That's all~ <br />
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Good luck with the oneshots~ FIGHTING!
-xMomo #10
Welcome :D
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