My Sweet School Monster

Description

This story takes place at school where IU and the school monster become friends and build a strong bond. Together they help each other find their true self.

Foreword

Hey everybody. This is my second story. Something happened to my first story sooooo. This first second story ( if that makes any sense) is probably not so good so please comment and help me.
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iceceam1234 #1
He laughed. " We'll see who the slug really is. Race you." Then he runs out of my grasp. See? You went from laughed to runs. It should be 'Then he ran out of my grasp.'

" Come on slug." He shouts out. He's already a few meters ahead of me. " Wait, I'm coming." I started to run. It felt great running in the sunny weather.
If you look here, it also goes from present to past tense.
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