✌ Time Machine Review Shop ✌ ~Open~

Description

Time Machine Review Shop works on how to improve your story, improve your writing and maybe give you enough tips to help you with subscribers.

Whatever you need, always here to help

- sunny_mylife

Foreword

Rules

oo1|| You must subscribe. Once you've picked up your review, you can unsubscribe.
oo2|| You obviously need to comment, since that's the way you request. If you feel uncomfortable, you can PM me the request, no problem.
oo3|| I read everything. , and Yuri. I do it all.
oo4|| Once I've posted the review, you must leave a comment behind on your thoughts. You also must either paste the review as a chapter in your story, or direct a link to the review in the foreward or description of your story.
oo5|| Please credit me or this shop, whichever. Or both. That'd be nice ^^
oo6|| Once I post the review, you have one week to pick it up. If not, I will blacklist you.
oo7|| It'll take between two days and three weeks to finish a review.

 

If the rules are not followed, you will be blacklisted.

Request Form

(copy and paste into the comment section and fill it out!)

AFF name + co author:
AFF profile link:
Story Title:
Story Link:
Characters:
Rated: (for what reason?)
English first Language?:
Summary:
Genre:
Additional Information:

Review Rubric

Title [5]

Description/Foreward [10]

Poster and Background [10]

Story Plot [30]

Originality [15]

Grammar and Spelling [20]

Vocabulary [5]

Entertainment [5]

Characters [15]

Writing Style and Flow [10]

Total [125]
 

Chapter Content

001 - Love Behind the Scene

Pending List

Emerson - The Spirit of Vengeance
DeicystPi - My Brother's "Brother"


 

sunny_mylife
Love Behind the Scene review is up! Emerson's story shall be next! I shall hopefully get it done soon. Thank you for your patience.

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bae-jinki
#1
AFF name: -Muasbby
AFF profile link: https://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/15539
Story Title: Vengeful Romance
Story Link: https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/758094
Characters: Im Mani, Bang Yongguk, Jung Daehyun
Rated: (for what reason?): slap and kiss scenes, , etc.
English first Language?: yes

Summary: Abandoned by his first love only to find her five years later as his and his fiance's wedding planner, Bang Yongguk is determined to make her feel the pain that she put him through.

Genre: drama, romance, slap and kiss

Additional Information: I went on a hiatus with this story and I wanna come back to it and I have lots of plans for it. I just want an honest and constructive criticism to see if the story is alright and everything adds up. If the pace is good, if it's enoyable, what I can fix and most importantly are the characters consistent. Are there any characters (Yongguk especially) that is flaky/inconsistent. Thanks so much!
kyouyas
#2
AFF name + co author: kpoplistener
AFF profile link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/152337
Story Title: Aish! That Jung Daehyun!
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/249776/aish-that-jung-daehyun-yongguk-zelo-jongup-bap-daehyun-youngjae-kimnamjoo
Characters: B.A.P and Kim Namjoo (OC)
Rated: no
English first Language?: yes
Summary: Kim Namjoo is offered a chance.



A chance to stay with B.A.P that is! Kim Namjoo finds herself living with the six idols as her life changes. She'll discover why her past was so dark. Kim Namjoo settles in a new environment as she experiences first love, first heartbreak, and a bucket full of laughter.
Genre: fluff
Additional Information: English is my first language
Kallen_Langely
#3
AFF name: Kallen_Langely
AFF profile link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/3717
Story Title: Little Quirks
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/207558/little-quirks-comedy-romance-originalcharacter-exo-chanyeol
Characters: Park Chanyeol (EXO), Yoo Mikyung (OC)
Rated: ---
English first Language?: Yes
Summary: Park ChanYeol was a genius novelist. With numerous awards and praise from the harshest of critics, there were very few who could deny the man's skills with words. However, despite his mastership as an author, there lied an incredibly eccentric character. Yoo MiKyung, the man's editor, was one of the few people to witness this side of ChanYeol. It wasn't just a matter of overflowing wastebaskets or dirty laundry piling up in the corner. It was more of lemon wedges neatly lined up on the seat of the toilet and socks carefully attached to the computer screen by use of clothespins. In addition, ChanYeol never met his deadlines, and when given more time (he begged for it), the man ended up watching dramas immediately after. It had gotten to the point where MiKyung was grateful to see sneakers in the refrigerator instead of finding the carcass of a lizard dressed in origami clothes between the pages of ChanYeol's manuscripts. Some days were just less painful than others.
Genre: Comedy, romance
Additional Information: I just want to know how I can improve, so blunt honesty is just fine with me. I'm mostly looking at flow and if I ever include too many details in the story. Many thank you's in advance~ ^^
missterious
#4
AFF name: missterious
AFF profile link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/50828
Story Title: Nerds, Dorks and Jerks
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/122853/
Characters: Carol Chen, Jin Tai (MissTER) + more
Rated: (for what reason?): swearing, adult situations, descriptive /ual situations but no ACTUAL
English first Language?: yes

Summary: Carol is a total nerd and is hopeless with girls. If only she could be more appealing like her best friend, Jin. In life, it's not always easy to know who's a jerk and who's an angel.

Genre: romance, girlxgirl, angst, coming of age/school life, dramady (comedy drama)

Additional Information: the fic may seem dauntingly long, with over 50 chapters..but i assure you, it relies on a lot of graphics, so sometimes the chaps are very short (less than one line, sometimes only having visual stimuli and no text). the graphics are very important as well - someone told me they skipped over them thinking they were ads on AFF lol...they're NOT!!! they contain vital info about the plot and the characters! :)
BubblesSweet #5
AFF name + co author: BubblesSweet
AFF profile link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/99275
Story Title: What I Call Hell
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/158568/what-i-call-hell-baekho-ren-nuest-minhyun-nuestjr-aron-btob
Characters: OC, Nu'est, BtoB
Rated: M for violence and cursing.
English first Language?: Yes
Summary: "Oppa! Noo! Don't do this to me!" Hae Ri yelled at her oppa as he was packing her stuff.

"Just please! I'll do anything! I'll only be away for months" he tried calming her down.

"Shiro! You'll be gone for exactly 3 months!"

"Please Hae Ri ah. For oppa" Baekho said with puppy eyes. She couldn't resist as usual and so she looked down at the floor.

"But, I don't want to live with your members..." she mumbled to herself.
Genre: Fun, comedy, happy, sad, romance
Additional Information: I would like you to be strict because I want this story to be very eye-catching! xD If you can, give me lots of advises or corrections so I can edit it and do better~ Thank you in advanced (:
ThatOneOtherWriter
#6
AFF name + co author: DeicystPi + No Co-Author
AFF profile link:http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/68415
Story Title: My Brother's "Brother"
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/190638/my-brother-s-brother-korean-romance-seunghyun-siwon--yunho
Characters: Choi Seunghyun, Jung Yunho, Choi Siwon, Jae Hwa (OC), Park Yoochun, other characters as the story progresses.
Rated: M for and pending ual connotations and actions.
English first Language?: Yes.
Summary: Two men who know each other only by face, with but one common link, will learn to live together comfortably. For six months.
Genre: Slice of Life, Romance, Humor
Additional Information: It's a get-together fic with an odd pairing. So it will be slow-moving in regards to relationships rather than a snail plot.