Review by infinexx (The Closer - Evaluations)

Breathe
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10/10 Points: Title - Before reading, I think that someone is telling the other to breathe. After reading I realize it's good after seeing how she takes a sigh and stuff. Maybe it's like take a deep breath, and calm down. But anyway it's innovative.
20/20 Points: Creativity - I liked the storyline. Sort of like a husband and wife. Very cleanly written.
10/30 Points: The Imagery and Detail - This was okay, but not a lot of imagery. And I feel like I would need some background information.
8/10 Points: Development - Jihyo was a confusing one. And also, there was Hanbin, he was cute.
7/10 Points: Prompt - Sort of.
10/10 Points: Grammar - Nothing wrong with this one.
5/10 Points: Enjoyment

Total: 75/100
Personal Comment: She cheated? Wow! Okay that's a little sad. Also I think paying attention to the imagery is something you should work on. I'm doubting you read the criteria if not the introduction as well. Also LKChoi I'm glad you helped out, you're both very nice people.

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BlueSapp #1
Chapter 1: Gee, I really like how you end. It this reminded me of every mysterious and angsty MV that usually end with the protagonist smiling ambiguously at the viewers...the plot twist is so unexpected! I kinda expected them to ge together and ride over to the sunset LOL but as a er for bitter endings, I really enjoyed reading this especially the part when she got HI’s call after waking.
supervouge #2
Chapter 1: Nice storyyyyy. I need moreeeeeeee. Hahaha im such a greedy. But the truth is, i really like it and i really want u to do more fanfics abt sjh and hanbin ??
faodail #3
lol u r trying so hard
ivoryy #4
Chapter 1: Oh? Cynical smile? Is she expecting the same thing to happen? Well I would to, actually. Hehehe. Oh my hun this really feels real. If only.... If only he REALLY likes her, I would fight for them! They make a really really really great couple in Running Man! I've been rewatching that part for idk how many times! I accidentally come acroos this fic n hun.. I never regret reading this! Please please please write more fanfics of Song Jihyo x idol! I'll be waiting! :-*
Kyutebaekyeol #5
Chapter 1: nice story...i really like them since RM..they were both so cute together :)
ddalgijam #6
ohh that was a surprising ending... I didn't expect it to be like it.. ;; tbh- I'm not familiar with this pair since I seldom watch running man but I just watched some videos now then I and my sister are smiling like idiots here lmao
kimjiwonnie #7
Chapter 1: Woah I never expected it to be a dream! It took me by surprise. I liked how you tried to weave scenes to align with the recent happenings for the Monday couple. Good job!
SakuraDyrah93 #8
Chapter 1: Nice story that you have here..i like it when song ji hyo was ship with any male idol..its like real to me..sometimes i wish it truly happen..hehe..btw, thank you for made this fanfics..i love it <3 <3
lejeuparfait #9
Chapter 1: The world needs more Hanbin and Jihyo fics, thanks for writing this one! Kind of sad and cynical at the end. If only it wasn't a dream, Jihyo ships are too real for me...Also, I think "stew" would be better substituted for "brew," but that's entirely your choice :P
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