[3/3] Originality: i'm glad that you get my point! I really don't like writing super angsty, dramatic and upsetting fics (which I admit is also my weakness) but yeah. Thank you for telling that you find this fic serious because that's my goal from the start haha. I like writing serious things. Because somehow I believe that it's my style? When the mood of the fic doesn't change... idk if it's a good thing or not but yeah i don't like it when a comedy scene jumps to an angsty one, but yeah..
Personal enjoyment: thank you for enjoying it!
Overall: i don't think i have time for revisions, but thank you for telling me that this fic has so much more potential!
Final: yup, your review will help me in a lot of ways. But I'm sorry :(( i don't understand the grading system. Is the perfect score 100? But you said that 178 is bad, so i don't understand what a 69 means. Anyway thank you so much! I'll give you a few karma points for sparing your time!
Again, I owe a lot to my beta. She's a really sweet friend and she guided me. Thank you for reviewing again :) But yeah, sorry if I don't understand the grading system :( I hope you can tell about it to me :)
[2/3] Plot: I admit, the reason I made this into judo!au is because I want Kyungsoo to be in a judo au fic lol, and because the prompt asks for mpreg. Hmm but yeah, I think it was really predictable that they'll end up with each other, right? I'll try to be more creative next time.
Characters: this is my biggest flaw in writing, I admit. The character development. I rarely talk about their hobbies, their personalities, thoughts, etc. Instead, I show them through their actions/ decisions? It's because I feel it's awkward to throw in the fic all of thheir traits and personalities in one go. I don't really tell much about their personalities, and yes I really admit that I lack on that :(( also, that part when kyungsoo knew that he was pregnant... i didn't want it to become super dramatic, so i refrained from putting metaphors or adjectives that associates sadness. But yeah because of my lack of skill, maybe there has been a void, as the fic didn't really show how they felt.
Flow and pacing: I'm glad you think that the flow of their relationship is alright. Slow-build relationship is also one of my goals.
[1/3] Okay, first of all, thank you so much for reviewing my story! And also telling me outright my mistakes! I would have more mistakes tbh if I didn't have a beta, however my beta is super nice to teach me stuff! I appreciate your reviews and comments. Allow me to have a long response to your review:
Title: omg tbh i admit that i really didn't think about it. I originally thought that whatever, as long as I make it an original title then it's okay. Alright, your point is taken. Next time i'll think about it further.
Description and foreword: tbh, i find it really awkward when i put excerpts in the foreword. This fic is originally for a prompt fill in a fest in livejournal, so yeah, i just decided to outline stuff. But you're right, I have to keep in mind how aff works.
Language: thank you so much for that useful information on dialouges! I only found about that just now. And as for my writing, yeah, I always struggle for the imagery. I think that's what I'm most comfortable, but I really need to improve on that. I cannot write descriptive scenes, or cinematic settings. However, I wish I can. I'll try to work on this. AND thank you for your tip re: numbers!
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