Chapter 13: I love this fic very much. I read this fic for nth times. Sorry I don't count how many times I read this fic -_- . But seriously this fic is one of those best fics I've ever read. Good job author-nim. Actually, I love all your fics ^_^. Keep it up author-nim.
Chapter 41: Seriously i almost broke my phone because i am frustrated with soo jin. I dont know i hate when things like this happen. Urghhh demmit girl DONT YOU SEE HE ING LOVE YOU FOR GOD SAKE KILL YOURSELF!!!!!
Chapter 24: 2nd time reading this, but still got butterflies in my stomach just like the first time....From my opinion sehun seems to be stalking soojin... Cuz everytime soojin gets in trouble, sehun was always there to be the knight in shining armour... Not so sure about this cuz its been a long time since i've read it
I finished reading this... I almost died few..no...many times... The cause was different each time.. This story made my heart flutter, broke into million pieces then glued them back again with love... It was nice to remember that I have a heart, too <3333
Author-nim, thank you :))) it was nice journey XD
Chapter 13: Atgjd as bjvov sf kds!!!! You know how I feel? My heart is itching!! Even if I scratch it, it doesn't stop!!! Ohmagash!! Sooooo cute <33333
Chapter 12: She's pretty and everything but she sure has some twin bad luck. Hahaha... It pisses me off how she gets into trouble most of the time. Impossible! Heol! I laugh to her character having having no sixth sense to sense when danger is on the way. (well honestly people really trust my instincts in real life. i can even sense when a man before is about to do something to me just by looking at him. my brother even commends me with this ability of mine. oooppsss sorry i blabber too much. just sharin'.)
By the way, I'm enjoying this sooo much. I love your way of writing. Congrats by the way for the success of this story. Gonna continue this. Fighting authornim! <3
Chapter 47: Heyya~! Yeayy I just read this fanfic,, again.. for the 2nd time.. the first time I read,, I was hoping there's a gangster who'll protect me like sehun.. Guess what?? I found one,, a gangster exactly like sehun just he's not that handsome.. hahaha.. when I get to know that guy,, I feel like in a fanfic.. :D
Chapter 45: This is honestly one of the best fanfics I've EVER read. The plot of the story and your sense of humor is truly amazing. Thank you so much, Authornim, for writing this beautiful story! ^_^
Chapter 41: I don't get it ... soo jin's stupid ..... sehun is clearly in love in her .... why is she avoiding him! Poor sehun . I dont get it . Frustrated at soo jin
Chapter 46: I really liked the friendship within this story. Haha about Jae Hyun becoming integrated into the group, and a possible thing with Jung Ah. It's interesting to see the friendship from Sehun's perspective.
Chapter 45: I actually think it was less realistic that you made her take so long to give in. No one's *that* stupid to drag on something like this forever, especially since everyone was shouting at her and especially since she was seeing her loved one get hurt and all that all the time. And I'm surprised she took all those hits from Yoo Ra emotionally. She's bad with erts but she never hesitated to tell Jae Hyun off, so why not with Yoo Ra. I get that she started to believe Yoo Ra's words but since Sehun came crawling back *multiple* times, you would think that she would get the hint, especially since she already admitted to Jung Ah that she loved him. So she wasn't in denial any more, except the fact that she somehow wanted to be? And didn't believe that Sehun loved her????????? Anyways, good story, Author-nim. I enjoyed the story. I have to admit, I enjoyed it a little less when all the self-created drama happened. It was fine for one or two chapters or something but to drag on this long with nothing actually happening except various people approaching her telling her how wrong she was is kinda.... And you're right that this last chapter was a bit rushed. Especially with all the self-made drama, it's weird that it would just... die off. And Yoo Ra conveniently being in Sehun's house? Well anyways, I enjoyed all the characters and I really liked the story, Author-nim! I'm gonna go check out your other stories. Thank you for the story!
Chapter 44: I was so mad and then I wasn't. Soo Jin is such an idiot and I reserve the right to be mad at her. All these stupid misunderstandings. And she ran away wanting him to chase her and then said he was gonna get sick. Ughhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. But that ending was very good, Author-nim. You resolved the tension. Even though I am still mad at Soo Jin, like Jung Ah is. I guess Yoo Ra is just that good. But wow, Soo Jin wanted the best for Sehun and left him with a cheater for a girlfriend while leaving when everyone he's ever loved left him (except for his friends).
Chapter 43: GOD SOO JIN I AM SO ING MAD AT YOU I CAN NOT. I said I can't blame her, but I really can. I'm so glad Sehun's friends put her in her place. She's hurting him so much just because she doesn't want to admit it. You can't tell someone who they love.
Chapter 40: I'm actually happy about the way the whole Jae Hyun situation turned out. And my heart has been hurting this whole time because of everything. Soo Jin you are so stupid. But since it is your first love and you have no experience, I can't blame you.
Chapter 40: I'm actually happy about the way the whole Jae Hyun situation turned out. And my heart has been hurting this whole time because of everything. Soo Jin you are so stupid. But since it is your first love and you have no experience, I can't blame you.
Chapter 36: YOU'RE SO GOOD. My heart was getting pierced every time I breathed (if you think I'm being dramatic, I'm not). That just means you wrote something that really makes me sad or feel emotions. I know I compliment you a lot but you're really good at writing.
Chapter 34: oh my god I held my breath all throughout that fight (well not really but you know what I mean). My heart was getting stabbed this way and that from that emotional fight and then the making up. Sehun, you are stupid. Soo Jin, you are also stupid but I feel like you're slowly becoming less stupid. You write so well, Author-nim.
Chapter 33: sigh. Here it comes. I'm glad you're consistent, Author-nim. Soo Jin is consistently too nice and too naive. Yoo Ra, even if what you say is true, you threatening Soo Jin doesn't really add up to your story. Well, I'm kind of interested in what will happen if Soo Jin tells Yoo Ra that Sehun still likes her. Soo Jin doesn't have any relationship experience, so she doesn't know the consequences of anything. And she still denies that she likes him. I kind of want it to happen so that Sehun can choose for himself.
Chapter 32: Oh wow. It's hard to explain the piercing feeling in my heart when he said "I do" and then the silence that happened afterwards. You're really good at setting up moods, Author-nim. I'm glad this didn't turn out into one of those cliched situations for too long. There are too many times when good stories were ruined because of that. Good going, Author-nim!
Chapter 25: And just as I asked that, Sehun decides to continue it. I love how you can change the mood of the story really fast whenever you want to. One minute I'm smiling over fluff and the next I'm aching for Sehun.
Chapter 24: It's sad how she's getting used to people touching her that it's not even that traumatizing anymore. And how I'm used to the phrase "Get off my girlfriend!" How can they not be going out? How has she not asked him about it? omg these two are so ridiculousssssssss and she's so street dumbbbbbbbbbb ackkkkkkkkk. I feel like a story in Sehun's POV will just be him stalking her trying to pretend he doesn't care and internally arguing LOL.
Chapter 23: It's weird that now I'm actually hoping that Jae Hyun doesn't have a crush on her. I really like them together as friends. And Sehun and Soo Jin need to GET IT TOGETHER and GET TOGETHER omg but I do like this. They didn't just all of a sudden lose their personalities and get all lovey dovey. They're progressing actually a pretty okay pace considering their stubbornness.
Chapter 22: Your writing makes me smile so much I can't. The friendships and the romance alike and even the random characters like Jae Hyun. ;w; Author-nim I love you
Chapter 21: Wow these two really are idiots. How can they still deny with the HOLDING HANDS and KISSING and PARENTS AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH IM SQUEALING SO HARD THEY ARE SO CUTE BUT STUPID. It's funny because I actually don't mind that they don't acknowledge their feelings. The way you wrote them makes me not care about every other time I've read characters in denial. They are seriously so cute together.
Chapter 19: Was wondering if this moment would ever come when Sehun couldn't help Soo Jin. I expected more to have happened, but Sehun was a gangster after all. I do have to say, the laughing felt a little bit out of place if you don't add stuff to increase the complexity of the laughter, such as relief or shock. But man... that ending was so satisfying.
Chapter 17: Jung Ah and Soo Jin together makes me smile because their friendship is so real. And wow Soo Jin's parent situation is actually normal. Hardworking parents who aren't TOO busy that they don't care about their daughter and aren't TOO lovey dovey that it's weird. And they weren't super poor but also not super rich and just enough stinginess. And wow Soo Jin sure gets into a lot of bad people incidents.
Chapter 16: Totally made up for it with this chapter. I'm really starting to worry about Soo Jin. I feel like she's going to get seriously sick. And oh my gosh these two idiots. At least something's starting to happen. Sehun's always helped Soo Jin and omg Sehun's friends. Such gangsters. As always, I love the little details!
Chapter 15: I'm sorry to say, but this is probably your weakest chapter in terms of writing (SORRY PLEASE FORGIVE ME). The conversation sounded kind of forced and the writing was a bit all over the place, but I still liked the beginning. I *knew* Jae Hyun liked Soo Jin, whether it was a crush or just as a person. Poor Sehun.
Chapter 14: I personally think you did a good job. I teared up. The only thing was that super long and caps locked "beep" because it was almost comical and not serious at all. You showing Sehun's friendships by having them arrive impossibly fast and having him being the one to not cry while everyone around him was. Of course the grandpa would know that she wasn't his real girlfriend. Not yet hehe. Also, I think it would have been more dramatic if you built up even more to Sehun crying at the end. Like it started with a few tears felt on her shirt and then he starts sobbing, but it was written really well. Good job~
Chapter 13: OH MY GOD I SCREAMED SO MUCH MY MOM WAS LOOKING AT ME. THERE'S TOO MUCH FLUFF I CAN'T TAKE IT. THAT ARROGANT BASTARD. You really make long speeches not awkward, which takes skill! And the development of their relationship seems really natural. I'm not talking about the events, but more the emotional development. And wow Sehun actually didn't hide who Yoo Ra was. Thank GOD this isn't cliched. I mean it is, but it's different. GOD when he said "don't fall for me", I thought this was gonna turn serious for a second. Thankfully it didn't. Their banter is really natural and true to their characters. You never disappoint, Author-nim!
Chapter 10: I seriously love how self aware she is, asking herself if they were stalking her. At least she's getting better; she actually screamed this time. And everyone has realistic reactions and feelings, even if the events aren't really realistic. Small details like Baek readjusting his hat, or her shock laughing and flinching at the touch of Sehun. And her crying because her prettiness attracted unwanted attention. When I was younger, I told my mom I wished to be ugly so that nothing would ever happen to me. Now her attractiveness makes more sense. And she actually does spend some time on makeup and hair. And Jung Ah acts like an actual best friend with flaws and strengths.
AWWWWWWWWW THE WHOLE JACKET THING. I TOTALLY understand because her friend bought it and all. I actually like that you don't mention the feelings until Sehun did something about it. It makes it feel even more real because she's trying to hide her discomfort, even from herself. And I feel really bad for Jae Hyun but he really at courting girls.
P.S. also correcting this because I saw this a few times but I don't think "younging" is a real word.
Chapter 9: What really makes this story stand out is how realistic and complex the emotions are. It's cool that the gangsters have a different side to them, just like how bikers are in real life. And how Soo Jin has her own personality that she sticks to and gets confused in realistic ways and not just sudden temporary loss of hearing. I always squeal when Sehun seems to read Soo Jin's mind. I think it's cute that Jae Hyun seems to like Soo Jin and actually cares about her, and it makes even more sense since we find out that their dads work together so they actually know each other haha. But he's still an . And Soo Jin has a different opinion on shopping for once. She dislikes it but isn't totally clueless.
btw I saw this more than once and it's "might as well", not "mind as well" :)
Chapter 8: ACKKKKKKKKKKKK I WANT TO SCREAM MY HEAD OFF THIS IS SO FLUFFY!!!!!!! And lmao never mind what I said before. It's not really realistic that she'd be *that* popular for her looks and smarts when she doesn't really care about how she looks... but maybe it's the combination of the two? Still trying to figure it out. And I know this is weird, but her mom took that exactly how my parents did. They were worried sick but they didn't even yell at me but instead just reminded me sternly to remember my phone, even though my dad really was close to calling the police. Now that you mentioned it in the A/N, I'm super impressed that you barely cursed. This is such skill right here. It still felt intense and everything.
Chapter 7: Awwwwww her feelings are so realistic. I would be totally overthinking the situation too about what the grandpa thought of me. And they are seriously so cute together. Staring at each other. And awwww him being good for his grandpa and blushing!!! And what happened to going back to the hospital before her mom found out LOL. awwwwww that grandpa is so sweet. That ending was so cute. This whole chapter was so fluffy I'm dying.
Chapter 6: Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this is the beginning of me shipping them. I was interested in how you were gonna make gangsters actually into nice people that still beat people up but you have me believing it now. He seems like he has reasons. Seriously love the MC and now I love Sehun and now I love them TOGETHER. I love how he teases the MC haha.
Chapter 5: There are a few errors here and there but it's okay in general. So now I guess she's popular because she's smart, pretty, and nice? It doesn't make sense for her to be popular only because she's smart anymore. And I'm glad this school is diverse like a normal school with different types of people. Haha I guess shock really does get to you so that she was more surprised than scared of the guy. And then pushing the guy off her? omg this girl. But I like that she has flaws.
Chapter 4: I really like the first part of this chapter. I'm glad you had her properly traumatized instead of those stories where the girl would have been all "I don't even care because I was saved by OPPAAAAAA". And ha! I should have known. Soo Jin is smart enough to do something like this even though she has no filter for . Take THAT Sehun! And I really like the thought you put into the conversation.
>"Did you think we were that stupid to accept the check?" "No." I kind of lied.
That part was really funny hahaa.
Chapter 3: I'M SERIOUSLY IN LOVE NOW HAHAHAHAHAHA. So she's popular because she's always #1 in academics? At my school, the smartest people were really well known though I wouldn't say they're popular. But I like it. This is seriously amazing haha. Sehun seems to have good reasons for when he beats people up. That one boy is so stupiddddd. $430 for shoes for his girlfriend???? I really like the MC's character. She doesn't think before she speaks but she's kind hearted and she endearingly lacks common sense, which makes sense since she's so book smart. And her friend's funny too. She acts just like us readers because she laughs at everything Soo Jin does hahahahahaa
Chapter 2: Awwwwwwww I was totally correct. It totally does work in an endearing way and it really does showcase her character. I'm really happy she's not those bland spineless MCs but she's not fierce enough to have good comebacks and she's not just the stereotypical nerd haha. Why do I feel like Jaehyun likes her? Like maybe he's that elementary school kid who thinks teasing your crush will make them like you. The MC's thought processes are soooooo cute. "stab me with a straw now" LOL she's so funny! And the part where she is more surprised by the fact that he knows her. I can picture Luhan and Sehun standing up menacingly with their arms crossed hahahaa.
Chapter 1: I like your writing ^^ It has a lot of personality in it. Sometimes, it gets a bit cluttered because you're trying to show every single thought that this character has, but I think it kind of works in an endearing way because obviously this is the type of character who acts before she thinks and thinks a million things at once. It shows her character so you don't have to tell us. Looking forward to reading this! I hope it isn't super cliched.
Chapter 7: I am sorry chingu, I am just leaving a coment after I read your long fanfict. Your fanfict is great, I like your linguistic. Although I am still learning English but I can't understand it well( maybe)
Chapter 39: Dear Authornim, I'm just wondering how many erts are there in their neighborhood. While Soo Jin has quite a strong character and mind and intelligence, why doesn't she do something to stop herself from being victimized?
Chapter 45: i really like your storyyyy...i think i will lost interest like other story i read but you story make my eager up ...i like that character^_^ ^___^^^^^^...thumbs up for youu..,and now i will read your seqeul...^_^..and i think the plot is more interesting..^-^
Chapter 45: Wait. I'm still curious why Sehun called her girlfriend the entire time. I was thinking because he already liked her but denied it in front of her and then in those times, his true feelings came out, plus it's fitting/convenient for those fight scenes, and also because he wants to believe in the lie he told his grandpa? It could be all, none, or a combination of these thoughts, but this is the one thing that stuck in my mind the entiee time I read this.
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