Chapter 21: Hey, take your time, you can continue whenever you feel better, you should and must prioritize yourself before everything. I hope everything that's going on, will get better. Stay strong
Chapter 20: The fact that Yoongi doesn't think much of an otherwise sentimental action is once again an element that holds my interest. It gets me wondering what on earth he's been through and why he is the way he is--the mystery factor is strong here.
If not this sparks something in him, I have a feeling his nonchalance is going to have an impact on Chinese food girl. I don't know, I feel slightly anxious for her considering all we've seen thus far concerning Yoongi, what with Insomnia, Nightmare, Jin's concern for him, his mother... well. As you can see, this story has definitely succeeded in making me feel all sorts of things for the characters, haha. I'm invested, enjoying every chapter, and am looking forward to updates!
Chapter 19: I love these straightforward and short snippets of the story in each chapter, even though i end up rereading over and over bcuz it's not enough. I love the buildup of the fanfic and can't wait for the next update.
Chapter 17: Finding Nemo. Talk about an unexpected choice in movies, haha.
I must say, Chinese Food Girl has some interesting reactions and problem-solving abilities. I was both surprised and greatly pleased - for some reason - when she opted to snap Yoongi out of his fugue by dumping water over him. I don't know, it was such a 'by the book' sort of way to wake a person up, per se, that it was really fitting for her to have done so. The fact that she handed him a key to her place as well, I feel, is some major progress in a small way!
Honestly, it just feels like there are a great deal of small, significant trinkets riddled in this story, that by the end of it all, is going to be incredible to step back and take a look at. You look like you're having fun with this, and I'm enjoying how things are going as well! So far, am super intrigued with Yoongi's 'profession' and his psyche, but these moments with Chinese Food Girl are quite endearing.
Chapter 17: Reading your stories are like dating a bad boy, the initial pull into something that's different and you know it may not what you're looking for but maybe what you need, the push and pull, wherein your chapters are so short it makes me want to stop reading because I want so much more, but then the appeal, i.e., characterization and content, pulls me back to it.
That was a really random round about way of telling you that I love your writing and this story. XD
Chapter 15: Whoa. So things really escalated, and... can I just say I'm really taken by how Yoongi seemingly changed? It seems like the murders triggered something in him - something habitual - and his state after them is actually very, very interesting. Like even though this isn't super detailed or doesn't straight out tell the reader what it is about him, I feel what Yoongi goes through in this chapter still has some great impact.
'At that moment, she owns him.' - This line speaks volumes for the entire chapter, I believe.
I'm really enjoying where this is going. Curious to see what Chinese food girl has in mind here, and seeing that she's serious for a change... ah! Keep going!
Chapter 10: Yoongi is too interesting. Really, I feel compelled by Nightmare and Insomnia in fact. Even though they're more often than not mentioned briefly - as if in passing, as the story progresses - I feel like these are defining traits of Yoongi he doesn't speak of. Jin's concern makes me all the more curious what's going on with him, and I really hope we find out!
Once more, this is a really unique story. I'm enjoying the overall format and how vague but effective your telling of it is. All the best with writing and updates!
Chapter 8: The fact that you end each sentence is really satisfying. Either with a full stop or a question mark... ah. It does something to me, lol. But more importantly, the fact that they are short sentences and they end so abruptly with a majority of them being full stops is what makes reading this story all the more compelling. I feel like it's intentional, as if each period is meant to stop a particular train of thought or scene dead in its tracks, and the following line is meant to be seen with fresh eyes. Which is actually a really lovely technique!
(Sorry, being an English literary major, I see some strange things in writing and I hope you don't mind me sharing these observations, haha)
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