Chapter 26: Okay so it took me a few days with work and all, but I binged this whole story and have just now remembered to leave a comment. Lol. So let me start by saying I love this story, Chen is adorable and great (not enough Chen x OC stories out there) and Jordan is a sassy hot head and I love it! Soooo good.
In a much earlier chapter you were asking for comments and critiques and I didn’t have any then but after reading the whole story so far I only really have one thing to say that you might want to look into (or not it’s your story :)) and that is your time graph on the story. At times you’ll say weeks passed but then it’ll only be a few days. Like when they were wrapping up phase one of the experiment it was like two weeks or something, but several times you say Jordan spent months with Chen. It was a little confusing trying to figure out the actually timeline, especially when it’s barely spring (I think) in the story but you mention that Jordan’s been out of jail for a year.
Again I’m not trying to dis your story because I love it and all the characters even Sylvia the sweetheart! I just wanted to point out this little thing to you.
[ALSO go gentlemen werewolf Chen! XD whoop for relationship steps forward]
This is actually one of the most adorable stories I've ever read. Their interactions are just soooo sweet. The plot itself is very very unique, nothing like I've read in other stories.
I can't wait to see how it unfolds!!
Chapter 1: First chapter and hooked already! Can't wait to see how Jordan and Chen's relationship evolves. Keep up the good work, and thank you for a promising story!
Chapter 26: One of the best werewolf fics i have ever read if not the best...believe me i had read alot before simply because i love wolves way too much... The way you portrait a werewolf is sooo unique and realistic...i love love it...so so so glad i have found this story... Got me hooked up right away... The characters are toooooo sweet to not love..even the researched team...thank you for writing an amazing story such as this
Chapter 26: Chapter 26: Yes yes yes! I saw what another reader said about the size and peeing and I also really appreciate that too lol Also appreciate the sweetness of them both asking for consent and if everything was okay.
I like how you described the pleasure she felt from Jongdae as "bolts" or "shocks" because it's such a clever way to connect it with his MAMA Lightning powers. I'm really excited to see what the flashing blue eyes means and what will happen next!
Chapter 26: OMG!!!!! This was so good! I wonder if when her eyes glowed they accepted the bond? And I wonder if the werewolf Gene is gonna be in her now? Maybe? I mean had there ever been a human varient relationship? Hmmmm?? All the questions now.
Chapter 26: did... THAT JUST HAPPENED? Like, YES, I was expecting that, but did that just really happened? OMFG And what's with her eyes turning blue? omg thanks for the time updating this!
Chapter 26: I remember reading so many fanfictions about ware wolves when twilight came out but the thought of had never crossed my mind so it’s really interesting that you mentioned it because that is actually a legit moral question if something like this ever happens in real life
Chapter 26: crying at whoever made the "thanks for making his realistic" comment because you know what, same. I appreciated that as well.
Also, I had never thought of people classifying werewolf-human interaction as . That is a line of thought I totally missed and would be 100% a thing. People would scream furry too I guess.
And yes, whoever thanked you for making her pee, I second that as well because NOBODY PEES IN THESE DAMN FICS or they wake up the next day with morning sickness and I'm like:...........*sigh*.
Chapter 26: Thank you for thanking me for upvoting! This story really deserved it.
Congrats making it onto that list, too!
This was a really sweet chapter, I wonder what the blue flash means.
I didn't know those ~ were called.. what, tidles? tildes? yeah.. I thought you said and I was like wow somehow mood.
Tbh at first I didn't like the font for this story, but after learning the plot, I feel like it fits. As if this is a typed-up report of an experiment, which is really cool. I also think that because every single other story (for the most part) uses the default that that's why at first this looks weird. (I don't mean to suggest you change it, or that it's a bad thing) Just the one thing I noticed different about this story within the first chapter. And then I got into the plot and I was like ah. This is not like anything I've read before.
It's really cool and pretty interesting how much Chen picked up on regular human interactions. One of my questions early on was like: okay, I've seen various fics about werewolves where there's mates and bonds and certain ways they UHHH do the or have ranks, I wonder how much of that will carry over to here, and I feel that you've kinda made your own path with it which is refreshing. I wonder if there's a courting process or wolfy part to the dating for this that Chen either instinctively knows or had to learn in werewolf society if there's a society. IDK he had a pack so they all came from somewhere and I'm just really excited for some of these mysteries to unfold and so far I got my answer for the part lol.
Chapter 26: This story is awesome, seriously! I just love it! How you wave the issue of discrimination etc. against different species or people into the supernatural plotline is amazing!
And there's so many things i could comment about now (e.g. the not so nice happenings at the gala, the public response to it, which is good i guess but also somewhat hilarious because it is just so superficial and fickle... or the pregnancy issue, which now that they all said is impossible i'm sure will hapen at some point lol). But for now i'll only write about the one thing that i found moust intriguing: Jordan's BLUE EYES!! The moment i read that my mind started spawning all sorts of posdible scenarios lol. Maybe she already did get pregnant and that's the werewolf baby part showing? Or maybe that was a sign for having sealed their mate bond? Imprinted? Although you never wrote anythong about werewolves imprinting in your universe... hmm! Hmm! Hmm...!
Anyway, thank you very much for such an awesome story!!
Chapter 26: i just found this story at aishmin's recommendations! its 5.15am in my country and i read this for a day today and i love it. Thankyou for this beauty!!
Chapter 26: I thought about pregnancy exactly at the moment when Chen asked for consent. Idk if this is a good or a bad thing that it's impossible for these two to have kids.
And honestly I think she needs more than just 3 days to recover. Why can't they grant her a week? I don't see how 7 days with no data would be such a big deal??
And can't they take in consideration the fact that she just told them something very personal??
Bruh why are they so strict
And really? ? Are you ting me right now. People are so narrow minded - I'm gonna stop right there.
Anyway, see you next update! This was one hell of a ride but it was fun nonetheless!
Chapter 26: And tbh the most realistic about this chapter is Jordan talking about Chen's size. Thank you for sparing us from the "oh no it's so big, whatever shall I do??" Cause let's be real no one is actually 9inches...
I told myself that the day you updates this fic would be then end of me, so you can imagine last night how I felt when i logged in saw the notifications. I would have screamed if it was so late hahahaha
I did not know it was possible to write / so beautifully. I had to remind myself to breathe so many times because Chen and Jordan are just too cute even when they're doing the nasty nasty lol.
Even though they've said they've done research and basically telling that variants and humans can't reproduce but I think they're might be wrong. Chen and Jordan are a different case, they're mates.....right?? So there's probably a chance that she is pregnant.
And her eyes flashing blue, is that some sort of confirmation that they are indeed mates? That they are now connected or something like that?
I thought about this so many times but if Chen is able to makes our heart and Jordan's do somersault without speaking just imagine if he could actually speaks??.
In my defense, even though Chen in real life can be a joker but I think here in this story he's such a fluff ball!!!
Thank you for the update!!!!!!! Now I can finally sleep at night!!
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