Can I just began by saying that after I read your story, I freaking loved it? 

The title brought my mood down in the beginning; it wasn't very eye-catching and intriguing. You also should (just a suggestion) change it to "A Secret Within Kim Jongin."

Your language was amazing; there were no errors with your spelling, grammar, or punctuation.

Also, your plot; I totally did not expect that Lu Han was the murderer. I just freaking loved it that I can't even explain it in words. The flow was perfect; it didn't go too fast or too slow. The characterization was amazing; everything was just perfect.

However, it was a bit too cliche that Jongin ended up killing Lu Han and living.

Overall, I loved your story and if you had this graded, you would have got a very high score.

If there are any questions, please contact MiyuChan immediately,