Title: The Twilight of Our Love

Author: GreenGardenPop

Characters: Byun Baekhyun, Park Jiyeon

Title:

I really like the title of your story, author-nim. It is unique and it really catches my eyes. Keep it up. XD

Rating: 4.5/5

Description/Foreword:

It is really beautiful with what you have written for the description and foreword. It truly catches my eyes and I hope for the readers too. Did you make that with your own words? If yes, I’ll give extra rating for you. Hehe.  It really is interesting for me and I would actually continue reading your story if I was not a reviewer.

Rating: 9/10

Grammar:

Your grammars are quite okay. It is just a few parts like:

She'd (It is better to write it in full words; she would. Unless it is a conversation or a dialogue) always bring him into a meadow to watch the evening twilight….

She always woke up before the sun and cleaned the house. (I have never heard of this kind of sentences before. Usually, it you always be: ‘She always wakes [not past tenses] up…’ But since she is gone, write it in a different way like; she used to wake up…)

I think that is all. There are few simple mistakes, here and there. But other than that, it is all good. I cannot give you full marks though. Sorry, author-nim..

Rating: 22/25

Characterization:

Even though you had few characters in your one-shot story, the emotions and the feelings of the main character is well written. When you described how he felt, it made me feel like I’m actually in the story or I’m part of it. Lovely. ^^

Rating: 4.5/5

Plot/Storyline:

Like I said before, it is well written. I simply love the way you write your story. No words could describe it.

Rating: 23/25

Writing Style/Presentation:

In my opinion, your writing style or presentation of your story should be a little bit bigger. Not too small, not too big.

Rating: 4.5/5

Originality:

I really like it. I think it is very original of you to write love stories in a very different way :)

Rating: 18/20

Enjoyment:

I liked reading the story because of the emotions and feelings that you described in it. I really felt all the emotions. It was really good, and again, I really liked the plot of the story.

Rating: 4.5/5