Where the Sidewalk Ends; A Review/Advice Shop [OPENED/HIRING]

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where the sidewalk ends;
a review and advice Shop

 

Formerly known as Rum Pum Pum Pum, Where the Sidewalk Ends is a review and an advice shop for those who feel the need to improve. I'm not an expert but I can help.

Updates

January 14th 2014 — Hiring. Message me if you're interested.

Accepting another batch of stories to review and changed outline of the review.

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request list

✔ "Whiskey Lullably" by amber_rose
✔ "A Warm Christmas" by colours_
✔ "we monsters distort too easily" by exothermc
» "Help me get away please!" by Xcookiesxandxpiex
» "Masked Romance" by TeddyBearx3
» "I Do (Cherish You)" by xdreamerx

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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request formS

REVIEWS
Author(s): [username]
Story Title: [title]
Story Link: [link]
Genre: [all that is applicable]
Length: [word count preferred]
Marked: [yes/no]

ADVICE
Username: [username]
Question: [1-2 sentences]
Elaborate: [if needed]*
Example: [issue in a story read]*

(You can ask just about anything that relates with writing. Examples: Take a look at this chapter? How do you create a 3D character?)

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our guidelines

 

GENERAL
● Subscribe until the request is posted, then you can unsubscribe if you'd like. Upvotes are not required but welcomed.
● Comment once before with the request form and once after the review with any issues or general observations concerning the review or advice.
● You may argue with the reviewer. I don't mind as long as it's reasonable.
● Complete the request form properly.

REVIEW
● Completed stories only. Incomplete stories are accepted as well now.
● I can decline if I want to. (rare.)
● All genres are accepted here.
● No credits needed.

ADVICE
● Must be about writing.
● One question at a time. After I answer it, you can ask another one.

 

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REVIEW RUBRIC

title (5), appearance (5), foreword/description (10), flow (5), characterization (25), plot (25), style (10), grammar (10), dialogue (5)

 

 

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xdreamerx #1
request: review
author(s): xdreamerx
Story Title: I Do (Cherish You)
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/611747/i-do-cherish-you-drama-elvin-romance--vinseop-ren
Genre: , romance, drama
length: 14 and ongoing
Marked: some
jiminniexmochi #2
author(s):TeddyBearx3
Story Title: Masked Romance
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/289560
Genre : , romance, drama
length: 8 - on-going
Marked: No
colours_ #3
Chapter 3: To be honest, the story was indeed rushed. I sort of lost the original plot but also didn't have enough time to write the story. That resulted in me neglecting certain parts of the story. (especially the characters><)

The name is random actually, haha. I will take note for the description^^ I would not have noticed that I have run-on sentences if you had not mentioned it... It's my first try writing in present tense and I guess I got kind of mixed up (?) I'm not really sure when I should put a 's' behind some words, so yeah.

I will definitely work harder on my writing and hopefully be able to develop a good style ._." The review is really helpful (I want to request again! Next time. And hopefully, with a story of better quality ><)

Once again, thank you for taking your time to do this review and I will credit you as soon as I use the computer! ^^;
Paradisezxc #4
request: review
author(s): Paradisezxc, Yonguk, byungchann
Story Link: https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/596779/telling-chunji-goodbye-angst-chunjoe-teentop-
Genre: angst,
length: There's 19 chapters
amber_rose #5
Thanks so much for the review! It was most helpful :) I agree that Siwon's part could have been improved, I was contemplating whether or not to include it at all or to just have Sooyoung's POV, oh well. Thanks again! Merry Christmas!
exothermc #6
request: review

author(s): exothermc
story title: we monsters distort too easily
story link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/619700/
genre: angst, tragedy (i guess?? laughs), friendship, dystopia
length: around ~2500, i guess
notes: this story is written in lapslock so i basically don't capitalize anything haha. and it's vixx with a major exo role in it?? i hope you accept it laughs;;
colours_ #7
Request: Review
Author: colours_
Story title: A White Christmas
Story link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/614007
Genre: romance and slight angst
Length: around 1500 words (short one shot)
P.S. I hope to have a more in-depth analysis of my writing style :) The plot isn't really on the creative side but I hope to know if my writing style is fine and how I can improve. Take your time, thank you^^
amber_rose #8
Request: Review
Author: amber_rose
Story title: Whiskey Lullaby
Story link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/598704
Genre: Romance, Tragedy
Length: ~9500 words

Appreciate any feedback you may have to offer! :) Thanks!
candiedwebs #9
Chapter 6: Thanks so much for the detailed review! I've already linked the review from my story. :) Ah the font highlight thing wasn't meant to be there, tbh. It was kind of a html problem when I copied the story from LJ to AFF.
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