Reviewer: Soo_Eun_Ae

Title: 2/5

At first, when I saw the title, I didn't think it would be a one-shot. At the same time, I didn't understand the meaning of the title after reading the one-shot. Does it mean that Yoseob is asking if there's another way to live? Or die? Maybe in the one-shot somewhere near the end, he would repeat the title and what he means by it. There's also a mistake on the title. "Is There Another Ways ?" doesn't work. It should be changed to either, "Are There Other Ways?" or "Is There Another Way?"

Description/Foreword: 5/10

The introduction to the story should be in the Description, not in the Foreword; while the credits and author's notes should be in the Foreword, not in the Description. A Foreword has 2 purposes. 1 purpose, is that you could use it as a quick preview throughout the story, without revealing the and ending; the other purpose is that you use it as a credits/author's note section. I suggest you switch the Foreword to the Description (except for the "Thanks ^^b"), and the Description to the Foreword.

Characters: 13/15

Plot/Originality: 7.5/15

I really like how you thought of the plot, but it reminds me of other stories. Someone is going through a tough time, wants to go suicide, blah and blah; but instead of making a miracle happen, you actually let Yoseob die. I only know about 3-5 people not including you that has the heart to let an idol they like, die. Bravo! I would've given you a 5, but the way you wrote the story, and the way the story flows brought it up notch.

Grammar: 9/15

You do have a lot mistakes, but not very big ones. One of them is the title that I pointed out earlier. Another would be phrases like, "So , remembering this , remembering who wronged me, who made me feel unwanted, who beat me and who violated me, who make me feel ugly, hopeless and useless.." has quite a lot of mistakes. It should be like, "So, remembering this, remembering who wronged me, beat me, and violated me, who made me feel unwanted, ugly, hopeless, and useless…" is the correct way of putting it. Do not repeat "who" too often, and do not put spaces in-between a coma and a word. 

Other mistakes are incorrect word uses, such as "why I was ending my live" is meant to be "why I was ending my life".

"Fourth is I was when I was thirteen." is incorrect as well. You could put it in a correct form with various ways such as, "Fourth? Well I was when I was thirteen.", "Fourth is when I was at the age of thirteen.", "Fourth would be when I was when I was thirteen.", "Fourth would be when I was at the age of thirteen."

"Sixth is I'm Worthless." should be placed as "Sixth is that I'm worthless."

When making a "…" (aka ellipses), you must make a space after it. "I cried…Cried myself into peaceful, the endless sleep." should be changed to, "I cried… Cried myself into the peaceful, endless sleep."

There's a couple more, but you get the idea, right? Even though english is not your first language, you still did a good job at it! 

Flow: 15/15

Honestly, this is the best part. The whole chapter was like a flow through the chain of Yoseob's thoughts! I liked how he listed the reasons why he shouldn't live before he decided to go suicide. It just explains what he went through in short terms; turning a whole packed story into some miniature 3-page doll book. It's written all out so well, I'm not sure whether that's a one-shot, or a list, or a blog post! Awesome job at it.

Writing Style: 8/10

Many people have this writing style, but I like the way you write it. It's placed into mini paragraphs, each one explaining a reason. I like how the small details make things more interesting in the story. Like, "I'm just a waste of air and space in this unpopulated Earth." is well put out. The "unpopulated" part made it very unusual to me. It's as though the Earth is not what it seems like it is. 

General Judgement: 10/15

I like the one-shot a lot, but it's not the type of stories or plots that interest me much. I do know that many people actually went through all the things Yoseob did, and even worse, too. So I like how you tried to put the situation on an idol and tried to show some truth through it.

Overall: 69.5/100