Reviewer : Twinity

Title: 4/5
First point (with all honesty) is that the title would make it hard for me to say, “Wow! That sounds awesome!’’ but more towards, “Hm, I wonder what that is about”. Unique and filled with curiosity. Not bad.

Foreword / Description: 9/10
Okay, what the hell is this madness. I swear, I’m extremely picky on descriptions, but your one was…MINDBLOWN. Literally, I laughed and choked on my tea the second I got to the last line. Even though it could be worded out better, it was extremely unique because…I have never heard of the Cinderella story in the Prince’s point of view. By the way, I would prefer, “But what about the Prince’s?” or, “But have you seen it from the Prince’s eyes?”

Characters: 12/15
I didn’t really like the characters’ personalities, I’ll be honest with you. I understand that anyone can be paired or OTP’d with anyone, but for Sunggyu and Hoya? It felt kinda odd. Also, I was sort of disappointed when ‘Cinderella’ had only played a cameo. You would expect Woohyun to be chasing after her or at least going through just as much trouble as the real Prince had when he was looking for her.

Plot / Originality: 12/15
I have to give you the points for the originality, but for the plot itself…Not so much. I was actually disappointed despite being so proud of the description (since it was so unique) because what I’d pictured was Cinderella running down some 17th Century French Influenced stairs and into her pumpkin carriage whilst dropping her glass slipper. But maybe I was too dazed in my childhood. After reading the story, I was surprised to see that it was set in the 21st century with companies, businessmen, technology and…No fairy godmother. It’s not bad, but it’s just odd and disappointing. What I had expected was some form of fantasy story where the fairy godmother helps the Prince after she had just helped Cinderella (she’s like a cupid). And you know how Cinderella isn’t actually a girl with dazzling clothes in the fairytale? I had also expected his rich-@ss to run into her and insults her of how poor or lowlife she is. HOWEVER, regrets it after seeing how pretty she actually was. Honestly, I expected a long, full-length story with love developing between a modern Prince and Pauper… (No, I’m not giving you any ideas…No).

Grammar: 12/15
I don’t know if you edit your chapters because there were plenty of mistakes at one point and I had assume you didn’t know when to use the punctutions UNTIL you used it in a similar sentence later on. So I assumed that your grammar is fine, but you just don’t re-check them for mistakes. Especially towards the 3rd chapter. A lot of sentences does not make sense. Either than that, you’re okay.

Flow:13/15
Nothing wrong with the flow. Not confusing or hard to read, it’s just some of the sentences that I failed to understand the first time around.

Writing Style: 10/10

I would say your writing style is fine. Good sized-font, good chapter lengths and no color.

General Enjoyment: 9/15

You would think that I laughed during the last chapter, huh? Actually, that was where I was most disappointed (sorry). I think I had just expected too much after reading the description because a story plot had instantly popped into my head (plot I had mentioned previously), but the actual plot was nothing close to it. Sure, he was looking for her, but there was no excitement before, during or after their meeting. It was just like one of those one-shots with a plot twist. God, it feels wrong to say that I didn’t enjoy it as much just because it was similar to my thoughts, but what I mean is that instead of ending (or continuing) with an intriguing, and unique plot, you took the wrong turn and chose to end it like how A LOT of authors would end a cliff-hanging chapter. Sure, it was surprising, but it was more towards another disappointment…Because I was too fired up.

Overall Score : 81/100