Review | bluereding
Dark Desire Shop Batch 3 [CLOSED & Hiring Trailer Makers]
"Little Steps" written by blueredling
Reviewer: Bubble
Title: [5/5]
I don’t ever think I’ve seen a title that fits this awesome with the story before in my entire life! Full score!
Story Poster/Background: [8/10]
You said that you haven’t done the poster but I love it! It shows the two main characters in the story and it also shows their personalities/roles in the story.
I see Minseok/Xiumin as the weak one while Luhan is the strong.
Foreword & Description: [9/10]
The description is simple, short and explains what the story is about in a perfect way. I don’t think that one-shots needs a character-description and just a short and simple explanation that fits with the plot. You nailed it.
Plot: [17/20]
I usually don’t like m-preg-stories. This was an exception. I didn’t even see it as an m-preg story until Minseok gave birth, it was like any other -story for me. And it was awesome. The story was both cute and sad. It was heartwarming, it truly was.
Characterization: [9/10]
I have, somehow, always seen Luhan as the “weak” person. But here he was the strong character while Minseok was the weak.
To me, it doesn’t really matter. Since they both seem to be very similar and it doesn’t matter for me who’s the weak one and who’s the strong one.
They could act like that in real life, to me.
Originality: [3/5]
It maybe not is the most original story here at aff. But I couldn’t love it the less because of that. It’s a very “typical” -story with a weak guy falling in love with a stronger guy. But the addition of pregnancy for Minseok makes it more original than before.
I like it a lot and it’s very original to a person who usually doesn’t read m-preg.
Flow: [10/10]
It didn’t go too slow or too fast. It was just at the same time and you explained each and every step very well.
Grammar & Spelling: [19/20]
You said that English was your first language and I believe you. It was as close to perfect as it could be.
There were only on a few times were I would’ve picked another choice of words, but that’s a thing about taste isn’t it?
Overall Enjoyment: [5/5]
This is my favorite m-preg-story!
Bonus Points: [5/5]
Total: 90/100
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