--Winners

1st Place:

ErisChaotica

with

"Back Down to Earth"

2nd Place:

genieforyou14

with

"And Then, There Was One"

3rd Place:

forevernever

with

"Nights Like This"

Honorable Mention:

awesomeGEE

with

"Stuck In Between"

Judger's Note:

You will not believe how hard of a time I had judging these stories. All of them were so written (no joke)! I thought I was going to shoot myself picking a first and second place winner ;___;. That's why I decided to take the stories apart and judge them part by part, and let cold hard math do the judging for me. 'Cause after all, math never lies. I'm not surprised that there's only a one point difference between the first and second place winners. If anyone wants to see how my "score sheets" look like, I've posted pictures below. If you want to see your scoring (since the picture does not show it clearly), please PM me or comment below, and I'll message you back. The winners, however, will have their score sheets posted (lol, sorry).

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To: ErisChaotica (first-place winner)

This is your score sheet:

Writing Style: 39/40
Plot & Grammar: 19/20
Flow & Characterization: 30/30
Use of Prompt 10/10
Total: 98/100


Holy crap, your story blew me away. At first, I was skeptical about it, because seriously, Peter Pan? Never watched it, don't know the storyline, just didn't care about it. But after reading your story, damn, I really want to watch it now, lol. In fact, I asked my friend about it today, but she started dancing to Neverland (U-Kiss) while telling me the story, and spent like, ten minutes trying to figure out whether or not Wendy's dress was blue or pink. She still doesn't know.

Okay, so, some thoughts on your writing (please don't brick me, omfg). About writing style, yours is amazing, holy mother, it really is. Like, I'd kill to write as well as you, or in your style. The thing is, I have an ideal writing style in mind, and nobody really reached that level (or came close to it). However, out of the stories written, I think yours is one of the best, so 39/40. Your grammar was perfect; I've got nothing to say about it unless I missed something. However, the problem I had was with how easily Eunbi accepted Sungyeol, who was floating outside of her house. Trivial, stupid thing, I know, but I'm a picky person (and yes, I deserve to be slapped, I'm sorry). Your flow was awesome, and I loved your characterization for all three characters, Sungyeol, Eunbi, and Sungjong. Your use of the prompt was quite interesting too. It wasn't between the main girl lead and the main guy lead, but between the guy and his sidekick, and I really, really liked that. Awesome story, I'm definitely subscribing and reading your other ones, lol. Don't be surprised to see me commenting on your other stories, lol.

To: genieforyou14 (second-place winner)

This is your score sheet:

Writing Style: 38/40
Plot & Grammar: 20/20
Flow & Characterization: 29/30
Use of Prompt 10/10
Total: 97/100


Yup, one point away, lol. I know your story was based off Sunggyu's 60Sec's MV, but it just surprised me in a way. How I imagined the story in the MV was much simpler. I love how you added a back story, and omg, the ending was just heartbreaking in a sweet way. I like your chapter title btw, it's really pretty.

As for your writing style, it's really, really, really, really nice, and I find it somewhat similar than mine (just like, what, ten times better?). It's really descriptive and, I don't know, sort of romantic in a way. However, your sentences were somewhat drawn out, and although they weren't run-ons, they were harder to understand. Also, there were many unnecessary articles and phrases in your sentences that could be deleted to make the writing neater (since after all, the aim of a writer is to use the least words to describe something--I disagree with this sometimes, but this is one of the times I actually agree, lol). All in all though, there's just this magic in your writing, and it has the ability to draw tears and have the reader crying like a baby. Your plot came from Sunggyu's MV, but it was beautifully written, so thumbs up to you! Your flow was nice, almost perfect, but there were just a few abrupt stops along the way that sort of had me going, whoa, wtf just happened. Aside from that, however, your flow was great, and your characterization was plain awesomeness, omg. The incorporation of the plot was quite obvious, and you fulfilled all of the requirements, so full points! Goodness, I loved this story so much /cries.