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Queen Kim DoYeon (i.o.i.) Yoo YoungJae
Lydine Di Accepted
Hi there, Di! First of all, let me say thanks for applying! Onto the application! So, the first thing I noticed was the first quote, "The White Cat was here, wasn't I?" It's just so sassy, I love it! Also, for some reason, the link for the kitty nickname, that picture just reminds me of the Piper from Inuyasha... Anyway, I used the same cape picture for an application of mine! I love the pictured. So, I didn't see anything wrong with your basic information; her age is a bit young, but I only limited to over twenty-one and the fact that she grew up in the guild makes it acceptable in my book. Stella is quite the cocky. Thinks she's Ms. Thang, doesn't she? I can so see her in for a rude awakening lol But, I liked the personality. It fit, once I looked at the background. I really like how you touched on how the guild is a family. A weird one, yes, but a family nonetheless. As for the trivia section, I would prefer if you added some more likes and dislikes as well has habits or mannerisms. It would give me more to work with. Now, as for your background, I thought that was very interesting. It would definitely make for some nice twists and turns in the story, and, possibly save her with local law enforcement (as long as it didn't get back to daddy lol). As for your calling card, does Stella draw the cat on the building? Is it literally on a piece of paper and she leaves it at the scene? I like the idea of the cat, it's cute and simple, but I just want a little detail as to what it is lol Alright, so her family and friends/rivals section looks a-ok. Nothing I can comment on lol Lastly, your love interest. I think it's really cute and realistic to develop feelings for someone who's been a part of your life for so long lol However, could you add a bit more to YoungJae's personality? Include a few negative traits. For now, I'm going to leave your application as pending. Once you fix the things I've bolded, I'll change it to accepted. Thank you for fixing the aforementioned items. Your application is now accepted! All-in-all I really liked Stella even if she would get on Nightshade's nerves lol Also, on that note, you can keep the last name lol
Night Walker Emily Bett Rickards Lee Donghae
-lightsaber Light Accepted
Hey there, light! Thank you so much for applying... Again, I should say. I'm glad you were interested enough to apply a second time lol I understand the stresses of university; I, myself, am currently a graduate working to get her master's in biology... Fun times... So, lets get onto this review, shall we? The basics look fine and I love that you used Emily Rickards. She's so beautiful. Also, I like the fact that Elizabeth is on the older end of the spectrum. It makes me all happy inside. Moving onto the personality section. I really enjoyed the personality and I love the fact that if someone gives her a sob story she'll back off. However, I do ask that you have a total of 3 positive and 3 negative traits. It'll help me have a better understanding of her and help flush her out more. Also, could you add at least 2 more dislikes and some mannerisms? It'll give me a better feel for Elizabeth. As for the background, I enjoyed it, a lot. It was believable and, in a way, simple. It wasn't over-complicated and it made sense, to me, for Elizabeth. I like how her parents kind of support her/kind of not. I also like how you threw in that she thought about and tried becoming a Queen but that it didn't fit her personally. Her family, friends, and rivals is all fine to me. I actually love the idea of intertwining applicants, because it's so believable, especially if both girls have been a part of the guild for a while now. Now, I will mention - you don't have to change anything - but I have it on good authority that someone else may use YongGuk in their application. Just letting you know because I might play with his position if I think something else suits him more. Again, you don't have to change anything, I'm just giving you a heads up. I think the love interest section is super cute and amazing. I love the childish antics and I like it even more since they're 28 and 30. It's so simple and sweet and almost pure. I really like it. Just a quick question, it's small and relatively unimportant, but I'm curious. When you said that his calling card was a piece of blue fabric, was it simply just a cut of fabric, nothing more? Also, who was the one who got her the hair pin when she was eight? You can PM if you'd like. I'm just really curious. All in all, I really loved Elizabeth and she sounds like a fun character to write. There were just a few things I need to help flush her out, but otherwise she is wonderful. She's going to be pending for now until you fix what I asked for :) Thanks for fixing the aforementioned things! Everything looks great now :)
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