Aish! That Jung Daehyun! (Reviewed by Gillian)

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Title: "Aish! That Jung Daehyun!"
Author: kpoplistener
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Title ☆ (2.5/5)

Interesting title, definitely something I haven't seen around on AFF however I have pet peeves about story titles including Korean slang. From a title like that, I can already predict that the main character and Daehyun will have this bickering, love-hate relationship at the start but then fall in love and end up together at the conclusion of the story. With a title like that, it's really easy to predict what will happen.

 

Foreword & Description ☆ (6/10)

Overall, the foreword and description is okay. The foreword was kinda messy. It’s simple and to the point but on the other hand, it’s pretty mediocre, especially the description. The first sentenced hooked me but then you lost me after that. Too many fanfics here in AFF have similar descriptions. If you’re going to write/use an idea that’s been used too many times before, please make it your own and make it stand out from the rest of the fanfics here on AFF. Try make it different from the others because there are way too many fanfics about an original character living with a kpop group. I know it’s a great story plot theme but really if you want to write a good story/fanfic, make it original as possible. Also, it was kinda weird seeing a character chart for the major character and then a profile description for a minor character. It would have been ideal if you just included the minor character into the character chart but I understand some designers have limitations about the number of characters in a chart.

 

Appearance (Posters/Backgrounds/Banners) ☆  (10/10)

I'd like to say that all the posters/chapter posters, background and the character

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JustDerpin
#1
Chapter 14: OMG. thank you so much for being so honest!! >.< I've never noticed those errors until now! ;A; thank you so much! and about the flow.. yeah, I screwed up big time when I was creating the story, and I was rushing it too much :/ *sighs* Well, what's done is done and I've learned from my mistakes so, I hope that the next time I'll get my review here, you won't be so disappointed! ^0^
Yeah, this story I've noticed that this wasn't as angst-y as I wanted it to be and the romance.. ugh. -.- I'm going to change the tag to friendship~ and romance shall be the sequel! >:DD this time with better flow and less rushed XD

anyways, thank you so freaking much!! TT______TT <3
Laydeen
#2
Chapter 12: Thank you very much for the review. I`ll pay more attention especially on the commas and apostrophes >.< And also the sentences and pretty much everything. thank you for your honest review. I appreciate it very much.
Keep up the good work~
shadowkissed
#3
Title: If Tomorrow Does Exist

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/282146/if-tomorrow-does-exist-oneshot-sunggyu-babysoul-soulgyu-babygyu

Author/s: Username; hogyuya

Genre: angst, romance

Rating: G

Pairing: het, GyuSoul (Baby Soul x Sunggyu)

Fandom: Infinite

Ongoing or Complete? completed one shot!

Is English your first language? no...

Specific reviewer? If you want a specific reviewer (either Gillian or Jessica), indicate here. If not, leave this blank.

Thank you! ^^
JustDerpin
#4
Title: Behind the Porcelain Mask

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/279382

Author/s: Just Derpin

Genre: Angst/Slice of Life

Rating: Everyone

Pairing: het

Fandom: EXO

Ongoing or Complete? Complete; three-shot

Is English your first language? No

Specific reviewer? Gillian
Thank you in advance~ ^^
AMizuPen
#5
Chapter 11: Thank you ^ ^ I will take note from your review (:
Laydeen
#6
Title: Uncommitted
Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/269560/
Author/s: AutumnHearts
Genre: slice of life, drama, angst
Rating: NC17- there`s no actual , but a scene leading to it (no ual though)
Pairing: Xiumin & EXO (there are moments, though most of it is based simply on friendship)
Fandom: EXO
Ongoing or Complete? Complete, since it`s an one-shot
Is English your first language? No
Specific reviewer? Anyone is fine^^
Thank you in advance~
kyouyas
#7
Title: Aish! That Jung Daehyun!

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/249776/aish-that-jung-daehyun-yongguk-zelo-jongup-bap-daehyun-youngjae-kimnamjoo

Author/s: Username; kpoplistener

Genre: Fluff

Rating: None

Pairing: DaeJoo (DaehyunxNamjoo(OC))

Fandom: B.A.P, EXO and more

Ongoing or Complete? Ongoing and 31 chapters

Is English your first language? Yes

Specific reviewer? 
TheMullekeee
#8
Hey.. TheMullekeee here,
Thank you so so so much for the review, it really is helpfull to me..
I will definitley keep your tips in my mind...
Again thanks a lot.. I'm really happy with your review... ;)
Byeeee~