It is so dark in here. I cannot see anything. It is cold and wet and quiet in here. I am alone in here. I am so lonely. I have not eaten anything in so long. I am so hungry. My stomach is caving in. I am so scared. I am very afraid. What if I am all alone in here for the rest of my life? It is so dark in here that I cannot even see my hands in front of me. If I have gone blind I will not even be able to tell. I have been in here for so long. I have been all by myself in here. I am getting very tired. I do not have the strength to heal anymore. I am so, so tired. I want to close my eyes. But everything looks the same. I am so afraid. I want to get out of here. Somebody, please, help me. Help me. Please. Please help me. Help me! Please! Somebody help me! HELP! HELP! HELP! HELP! HELP HELP HELP
Chapter 9: wow i didn't realize how long ago the first chapter was posted! i always come back and reread it bc it was honestly so good
this was pretty spooky, especially since its involving kids; thats like my weakness to feeling uncomfortable and scared bc i don't want them to be hurt :(
:(( rip to jae's mom... i could 100% imagine and understand her fatigue, your writing is awesome
that swamp monster or whatever was out for blood lol hye is better than me bc i would be screaming and crying like i've been shot until i got home
glad they got out of there at least but i guess it doesn't end that easily :/
this story is great even after all this time and i definitely will be rereading this chapter until ch.3 comes out in 2025
jokes lmao i hope you've been well and/or are doing well now! thx for the read!
Chapter 8: okay. OKAY.
this is seriously good. like, so, SO GOOD. i always compliment authors on their writing because i want to be supportive of their works but your writing style is genuinely good, the kind that i seriously enjoy so i reread it three times already. i'm just go glad that i was able to find you and this story! you are such a gem, ugh < 33333
and now onto the first chapter, i love how sad and dark the town is because it's the perfect setting for my kind of favorite horror story or tv show ( and even fanfics and rps dhfdjhfdjfd )
i just love how detailed you are with describing the diner and the characters in this chapter. mana is definitely a strange girl, the way you portray her doesn't make me hate her because she's "creepy" but i rather find her to be a *very* interesting character, probably my fav character just after hye
also i see hye having a puppy crush on jae!! is it a puppy crush? OR A BIG CRUSH but oh god it's so cute of them for having a crush on their friend like it makes the story so much more... fluffy? and normal?
i love that detail about them like everything feels so mundane rn and we're probably gonna miss it before something twisted happens to the town ( now i wanna cry i dont want my babies to get hurt )
jae's such a sweetheart and a good friend uwu
i'm very curious about jin as well like how you said she could do so much better, and she's so cute! thank god ann always replies to her jokes JDHFDJHFD. talking about ann, oh my god i love how his character is written because he's so Perfect. Perfect. perfect. PERFECT. and i can't wait to read more of his interactions with everyone else, they seem to be super best friends and that's so heart-warming....
and that shrine... whats up with the shrine, im SWEATING
dark is now my most fav applyfic u can't stop me from rereading everything and looking super forward to the second chapter
Chapter 8: Gosh. I love that the diner itself is like a character in this story. It makes the setting so much more lively and vivid. And dang if you didn't make me want to listen to some old school rock and roll!
But oh Mana sweetie...her inner thoughts break my heart a little. Mana's thoughts go to such dark places. Fascinating to read, but still a little heartbreaking to read from someone so young. She is certainly a unique character and I'm looking forward to more of her! And the voices. That is certainly disconcerting and just when you think the poor girl won't get a break HEY! IT'S HYE! XDD
Hye is another fascinating character and I look forward to see how you write them. I've read a handful of fics with non-binary, so it's not too confusing for me at all! And can I say that Mana saying she might not get it, but accepts them anyways is just making me love her so much? Hye is that one quiet friend you can rely on to remember the details. They're a nice one to have, especially for friends like Mana who need someone with a quieter energy. They're drink orders already say so much about them. You got Hye and Mana with just water: simple, understated. And then here comes ROOTBEER. And then fizzy fruity but its not right so iced tea it is. And then old man ginger ale (which I love). Some symbolic drink orders I must say XD.
Jin's POV is so different from Mana and Hye's. She feels like this little bright spark that has emerged to light up the dreary, quiet atmosphere we've had so far! The idea that this popular girl, the golden girl, is choosing this crowd over what obviously could be higher social ranked groups is also interesting and says a lot about her. Not all pretty sparkles and popularity. We got some layers here too? I hope to find out. The relationship between Hye and her is also very cute. But the fact that she is dismissive of the note in a way makes me wonder about Jin and what is actually going on in her mind.
There's my child! X3 Oh my gosh. Hye likes Jae. It's cute. I love the cute. To me Jae feels likes the more calming neutral energy to the group so far. I'm loving the detail if his smile and how Hye knows his real ones are reserved for the people he's close to. He seems more straightforward and less complex compared to some of the others: just a solid guy.
AND HERE COMES ANN. Now we have our more chaotic, strong force in the group! The friends all seem to balance each other, which is nice. Ready how they all readily tease Ann and he just rolls with it. The group dynamic so far is something I'm looking forward to reading more of! And I also like how sprinkled in here there are mentions of pasts that may come to haunt these characters. Jae's mom, Mana's stepfather, even some of Jin's indifference maybe? And that lingering feeling of those woods and the shrine? I need more! What does Hye not know that the others do???
Chapter 8: wow you really write so good. i honestly didn't want the chapter to end; i'm really in to this universe
the town is so gloomy but it's to be expected
:( mana... worse is to come, babe
the poem jin got made me laugh on the first line lool it is kind of creepy tho
based off the diary entry, it seems like hye doesn't know what's up with shrine b/c they didn't go into the cave?
i will wait patiently again for the next chapter!
Chapter 7: This group chat is such a cute idea! Its a little glimpse at group dynamics. I love how everyone has nickname and not their full name, and the stickers are A+. I'm excited for this. You set up a good start for the horror we can expect to come. And now I know you're gonna break our hearts with how sweetly normal this little char is. Ahhhhhh. I'm not ready!! (Lies: I'm so ready.)
Chapter 7: i'm just imagining all the horrible things that are going to happen TT_TT they seem so sweet
lol at ann trying to understand mana's stickers and everyone else just ignoring it hnkjnkjd
also the teaser is very intriguing. i like how you describe the scenes without giving too much description
it gives off this real eery feeling and makes me want to know what happens next (though i already do :-/ rip guys)
horror is so difficult to write but you've captured the feeling really well even if nothing horror-ish has happened
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