Five Shots of Espresso- ariadne22
Light Livid Dreams: A Review Shop (Open) (Batch 2~)Hello ariadne22! I was very excited to read your story! It was a wonderful read ^^. Er, I don't use fancy layouts 'cause I at them, but hopefully it's aesthetically pleasing enough lmao. Shall we get into the review?
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Introduction (9.5/10)
Really enjoyed how Hoseok drowned himself in coffee (100% can relate) and really showed his passion for dancing. I did however, find the 'happy being alone, no need to date' a little cliche, but it did serve it's purpose as it later shows why he's so anxious when it comes to the idea of dating Yoongi, as you later reveal that he believes he's a 'bad boyfriend'. You also did a good job at featuring Namjoon as a character as well.
Basic summary (8/10)
Your basic summary (foreword) was pretty pleasant and gave off the fluffy, comedic vibes that your story portrays. However, I do think it was slightly cliche (I'm gonna use cliche like 50 times, sorry my vocabulary range is like three words). There are a lot of stories that say "too busy for love, then ___ comes in and changes it all"
Title originality (10/10)
I really enjoyed your title! It portrayed Hoseok's need for coffee (I feel him) and then the reader later finds out how it connects to Yoongi. Very well done!
Neatness of story/presentation (10/10)
Nice and easy to read. Correct punctuation and clear pa
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