Organization: 4/10: Your organization was somewhat ok. You didn't really have a opening of how or why the affair happened. I was confused because your story really didn't have a foreword explaining how or why Jessica got sick. It confused me greatly of what was happening when the story first started. I loved how you ended up piecing everything together thoroughly, and eventually it explained everything. I understood that Krystal and Sehun are in guilt for what they did, but why did they do so? Make sure you add enough detail int he foreword let your reader know that this happened or is going to happen. You dropped it on me adruptly. XD

Flow: 5/10: I was pretty confused, everything was somewhat everywhere. They was shouting in front of Jessica, but you could have made her speak up as a plot twist before she passed away. Beside's that, the emotion in the story was very in depth in deep. I, myself, could feel the emotion as if I was in the story. It made me feel like I was in it. There was many emotion flow's you used, and I picked up on all of them indiviudally. It really made the story come to life, and made up for the sort of jumbled organization. Make sure you explain more in the flow of where goes in what place in the story, it had alot of emotions surging everywhere, Don't worry

Grammer: 20/20: Wow, just wow! Your grammer was on point! You didn't use small vocab either, which makes the reader's realize that you are advanced and well worded when you write. Each word seemed to have symbolizim to them, and it gave the story more of a feeling. I'm impressed that you kept it up throughout the story, it proves that you are a dedicated author. Even though some words we're sort of hard to understand (maybe it's just me X3), it was still easy to grasp that you wanted to give this story more volume. Your character's also expressed how they felt and what they thought as well, using the same type of speech and feeling too.

 ~~ Cute x3

Attention Grabber: 15/20: Your story title is the only one labeled 'Yesterdays Tomorrow.'. But, there was many other stories that have the same simaliarites such as: ' The other Day, Today, Tomorrow, Yesterday' and etc.' If I was a random reader, I would have thought it was like the other stories. Try adding some more emotion from what the story exposes. Beside's the title, your layout for your story is very limited, but yet in a good way. I like the font you use, it wasn't all in my phase and it indicated the difference between speech and thoughts. The background was also light and soft, which didn't distract me from the story as well. You did a good job 

Enjoyment: 10/20: I won't lie, I enjoyed it. Even though, I was utterly confused on what was going on. In my mind I always stopped and thought "Why is she not speaking? Why would they do that to Jessica in the first place? Questions, Questions, Questions'. You didn't really explain much, only in brief detail. Make sure to take your time. I was interested enough to read over it a few times to try and understand it better. Besides the confusion, the amount of emotion like I said before is amazing! You did well on your character's point of view and it was like you threw everyone into your story as witness's. I'm really impressed on the emotions you did.

Plot: 5/20: Your stories plot was somewhat everywhere, like I said before. Were Sehun and Krystal saying all of this in front of Jessica? Or was this in the hallway? I understand that this is taking place when they are visiting her, and there is alot of complications and disagreements between Sehun and Krystal. Your plot is a little shaky, and I was only able to understand a little bit of it. It was noticeable that they both felt guilt for loving each other, but how did this happen? I like how you tried piecing it all together in Krystal's POV, but try switching over to Jessica's or Sehun's so we could see more of a insight to what they see or feel as well, It's alright C:

Appearance: 4/5: Like I said before, your title of your story is very unique, yet common as well. You should have changed up the tilte of the first chapter, add some type of emotion ( Today's Reverse :: Or something like that)). Besides your title, your background isn't to or colorful, and it isn't in my face. It's a good thing, it didn't distract me from the story and cause in trouble. Your poster for your story showed the emotion for it as well, and it made me have a good feling even before actually reading it. It really grabbed my attention, and it made it quick to started reading it. I enjoyed the way you switched up your font's as well during the story, Clever C:

Extra: 5/5: I really enjoyed your story x3 it was amazing, and I wouldn't mind reading it again. I enjoyed the emotions, and I really think you should continue it :D I really like the appearance and the way you expressed everything. You have some work to do, but practice makes perfect right? There's a few rough bumps in this story; such as the plot and how some things fit together, but as well as the good perks; The grammer and ideas. Your story is seriously one in a million x3 I really like it, and I will like to read more stories from you in the future. Despite my harsh grading and everything else, I'd suggest this story to many other people :DD

Overall: 30/50 x3- I'd recommend it :D

Rate Scale: 50/100: Keep up the good work :D

          Make sure to check out the story guys :D It's amazing!! 

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1050885/yesterday-s-tomorrow-angst-jessica-jungsis-krsytal

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