Thank you for my review! I saw there was a lot of negative comments but that's fine! My writing on paper is a lot different to when I'm typing it up so yeah I tried! Also I know about the grammar since I have a beta reader to fix all my mistakes! Thank you for the useful review!
Chapter 3: Even though this isn't my story, I've really liked reading these reviews! Since I'm new to writing, it gives me more insight on how I could make my story (and future stories) better. I have one more chapter to do then I can't wait to fill in a request form ;D
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