Am i the only one that read the new ver ?????
I really liked it !! you have improved a lot and are using strong ac table actions , the chanhee in the traffic scene was well-written ~
A great element you incorporated was how the ch was eventful , like first byunghun had those contractions in the kitchen then called chanhee then back to his bed then to the bathroom and chanhee came and found him there , and that's when he carried him to bed and all the drama , also the scissor thingy ~ i never intend to write a delivery scene but if i did , there's a good chance i would forget such details ~
so , All in all , that was really a good improvement ~~
let me point out something though ~~ for a more reader -friendly experience , it's good u are now leaving more spaces and i suggest you enjoy customizing the font ~
Am i the only one that read the new ver ?????
I really liked it !! you have improved a lot and are using strong ac table actions , the chanhee in the traffic scene was well-written ~
A great element you incorporated was how the ch was eventful , like first byunghun had those contractions in the kitchen then called chanhee then back to his bed then to the bathroom and chanhee came and found him there , and that's when he carried him to bed and all the drama , also the scissor thingy ~ i never intend to write a delivery scene but if i did , there's a good chance i would forget such details ~
so , All in all , that was really a good improvement ~~
let me point out something though ~~ for a more reader -friendly experience , it's good u are now leaving more spaces and i suggest you enjoy customizing the font ~
Chapter 1: Wooow panic panic xD
And Byunghun still have some energy to snap back uselessly while he has contractions xD
I admire Chunji because he didn't faint during the labour :P
It's a little rushed but well if you have a sequel for us, I will gladly wait to read it :)
Thanks for your story and keep going!
Chapter 1: Honestly i prefer chanhee as omma and byunghun as appa coz chanhee more beautiful than byunghun are..^^..i find so funny bout ur story coz i can't imagine it..but please in next fanfics u want to write..please write chanhee as wife n byunghun as hubby..it's would be much interesting..u know how good chanhee as "omma" in Teentop right??nice start buddy..good luck
Chapter 1: So Byunghun is a girl here.. to be able to push that baby out.. you know what i mean ;)
Yes, a sequel would be nice!
I hope you'll update 'Stay' soon.. (:
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