NOTE: WHAT YOU'RE ABOUT TO READ IS MY HUMBLE OPINION ONLY, DON'T TAKE IT TOO PERSONAL BECAUSE EVERYONE THINKS DIFFERENTLY. KEEP IN MIND YOU ASKED FOR A REVIEW AND I'M ONLY BEING HONEST ABOUT HOW I FELT WITH YOUR STORY WITHOUT NOTHING ELSE LEFT TO SAY I HOPE YOU UNDERSTAND MY POINT OF VIEW AND FEELINGS.

TITLE (+13)

THE TITLE MAKES JUSTICE TO THE FEELING OF THE STORY, IT'S ACCURATE AND HAS QUITE A LOT TO DO WITH THE STORY LINE, STILL I THINK IT WASN'T THAT ORIGINAL, THERE ARE PLENTY OF OTHER STORIES WITH THE SAME NAME. YET, AS I SAID BEFORE, IT FITS THE STORY PERFECTLY.

GRAPHICS/APPEARANCE (+5)

THE FIRST POSTER IS CUTE & ROMANTIC, SO IT GIVES A FEELING THAT THE STORY IS GOING TO BE FLUFFY. THE SECOND POSTER IS JUST TOO BIG, YOU SHOULD CONSIDERATE GETTING A SMALLER POSTER.

DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD (+8)

THE DESCRIPTION OF YOUR STORY IS FINE, I HAVE TO SAY THAT I DID THOUGHT BAEKHYUN WAS GOING TO BE THE ONE HAVING A CRUSH ON CHANYEOL. BECAUSE THAT'S WHAT THE DESCRIPTION MADE ME FEEL, BUT THEN -PLOT TWIST- CHANYEOL IS THE ONE WITH A CRUSH ON BAEKHYUN. YOUR FOREWORD IS FULL WITH CREDITS SO I DON'T HAVE NOTHING TO SAY ABOUT IT.

ORIGINALITY(+8)

THE STORY IS ORIGINAL IN IT'S OWN WAY, I MUST SAY THAT I ACTUALLY REALIZED CHANYEOL WAS THE SECRET ADMIRER WHEN I WAS AT THE MIDDLE OF THE STORY BECAUSE CASUALLY HE WAS NEVER THERE WHEN BAEKHYUN'S PRESENTS WERE PLACED IN HIS LOCKER AND HIS SEAT.
 

WRITING STYLE/ GRAMMAR (+5)

I GIVE YOU FIVE POINTS FOR TRYING BUT I RECOMMEND YOU TO EDIT THE STORY OR TO FIND A BETA-READER, THERE'S A LOT OF GRAMAR MISTAKES THAT I NOTICED FROM THE MOMENT I STARTED READING THE DESCRIPTION, IT WAS HARD TO UNDERSTAND AT TIMES SO I HAD TO GO BACK AND RE-READ THE SENTENCE. IT'S A NICE STORY SO YOU SHOULD DEFINITELY CHECK THE GRAMAR.

YOUR WRITING STYLE IS REALLY PLAIN, YOU GIVE NICE DESCRIPTIONS OF PLACES, YOU SHOULD TRY AND DO THE SAME ABOUT THE CHARACTER'S ACTIONS. I'M SORRY BUT I HAVE TO SAY YOUR WRITING STYLE IS NOT SO DIFFERENT FROM OTHERS, YOU SHOULD USE MORE SYNONYMS AND TRY NOT TO REPEAT THE SAME WORD MORE THAN ONE TIME IN THE SAME SENTENCE.

FLOW / STORY LINE / ORGANIZATION (+10)

THE FLOW OF THE STORY IS JUST RIGHT, I NEVER GOT LOST BECAUSE YOU WOULD EXPLAIN HOW MUCH TIME THERE WAS LEFT UNTIL THE DANCE NIGHT, STILL I THINK YOU SHOULD MAKE MORE TRANSITION BETWEEN THE CHARACTER'S DIALOGUES.
 

READERS RESPONCE (+4)

YOU POSTED YOUR STORY ONLY THREE DAYS AGO, SO THE RESPONCE FOR JUST THREE DAYS IS GOOD.

REMEMBER UPVOTES ARE MOSTLY GIVEN WHEN THEY READERS ACTUALLY ENJOYED AND/OR FOUND SOMETHING EXTREMELY SPECIAL ABOUT THE STORY, SO YOU CAN MAKE YOUR OWN CONCLUSIONS CONSIDERNIG YOU HAVE SIXTEEN SUBSCRIBERS AND ONLY FOUR UPVOTES.
 

ENJOYMENT: (+5)

THE GRAMAR MISTAKES WERE A KILLER, THEY TURNED ME OFF RIGHT FROM THE START. THE PLOT WAS NICE AND THE STORY BEAUTIFUL, I LOVED HOW CHANYEOL GOT HELP FROM THEIR FRIENDS AND HOW HE CONFESSED TO BAEKHYUN. I'LL GIVE YOU A LITTLE TIP THOUGH, YOU SHOULD TRY TO EXPLAIN HOW HE MISSES CHANYEOL AND HOW HE KINDA FEELS SOMETHING FOR HIM T0O, BECAUSE FOR ME IT LOOKED LIKE BAEKHYUN JUST HAD A CHANGE OF HEART AFTER THE CONFESSION.

FINAL SCORE: 58 / 100

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