CRITERIA

First Impressions - *This is where I will skim over your Foreword. Some questions I will answer: How is your overall layout? Is it appealing? Am I interested so far?

Title - *I will go into a detailed account about your Title. What impression do I get from the title alone? Is it appealing? What can be improved?

Foreword/Description - *I will go into a detailed account about your Foreword. Does it grab my attention? If so, where? If not, what can be improved? Can anything be added? I won't be very harsh here since I know that most authors organize their forewords in different ways.

Plot - *This will be an honest opinion about your plot. You are free to take the advice/suggestions that I give. You are also free to reply back to this if it isn't to your liking. I will most likely be looking for originality here, though I know that some stories are spin-offs.

Characterization - *Truthfully, this is where I get very passionate. I may or may not be brutal, just a warning. You are free to take the advice/suggestions that I give. You are also free to reply back to this if it isn't to your liking. I will be looking for character depth, especially your main characters. What about your characters makes your story approachable? Do your characters have chemistry or are they harmonious within your story?

Grammar/Sentence Flow - *I won't lie; I'm quite the Grammar Nazi, since I'm an English Major. However, I will not bash your grammar. Instead, I will look for constructive ways to improve your grammar and conventions. My goal is not to degrade you, but to help you become a better writer (even if you are an amazing writer already).

Style/Diction - *This is a writer's most important characteristic. To have your own style and way of telling your story is crucial. Instead of providing constructive criticism here, I will give my honest opinion on how your Style/Diction attracted ME.

Overall Impression - *A basic conclusion of my thoughts.

Additional Comments - *Anything that I would like to add to my review.

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teenme14 #1 Oct 21, 2015 03:22:24

Hi ^^ Are you still open for requests?

JESLEN #2 Jul 21, 2015 21:36:05

Requested :-)
Thank you very much in advance ^_^

JESLEN #3 Jul 21, 2015 06:14:52

Hello ^_^ It's me! Lols. Ive already credited you!
And gosh. Your reviews are really thorough and satisfying.
I would like to request again but I have one question though: after reading rule 5, is it ok to request when I already received reviews from other shops? Thanks so much

ScarletBallerina #4 Jul 10, 2015 01:57:44

Chapter 9: Hello! I'm so so sorry for responding to you very late, I was quite busy with other things too, myself hahaha!

As usual, thank you so much for the in-depth review! It gave me a much more-thorough grasp with regards to writing one-shots! The review helped me so much! Your words will help me improve and I got to learn a few bits and pieces of advice! Thank you so much!

Diaz96 #5 Jul 8, 2015 13:47:31

I've requested!!!!

jovayuyu #6 Jul 8, 2015 06:47:58

Hi! I have requested! :-)

kpopfanficmonster #7 Jul 8, 2015 04:30:18

Chapter 5: Omg that gif tho. Hahahahaah

Jung. Taek. Woon.

JESLEN #8 Jul 7, 2015 01:59:26

Chapter 10: Congratulations for finishing your degree! I understand that we must prioritize our lives outside of AFF so dont be sorry about the long wait. This review is worth waiting for :-) And you're not harsh at all silly! :-) I loved constructive criticism thats wThank took such great care in selecting reviewers. Amd you'rethe first reviewer of this story. Once again,thank you very much for this awesome review. I will make sure to incorporate the suggestions and to credit too (using my mobile right now so it's kinda hard to do it properly). But i promised that i will definitely credit :-) Thank you for deciding to continue reading the story despite the flaws. I really appreciate the time you invested in reviewing this and I will surely request again :-)

3/3

JESLEN #9 Jul 7, 2015 01:50:20

Chapter 10: I absolutely agree with all of the things that you pointed out about the plot. To be honest, all i thought was the beginning and end of the story. I already laid out the beginning and i have the idea how to end it. But my mind keeps on juggling ideas for the events in the middle of the story. That is why it took me months to update, it's like i had this difficulty in threading dark water where i had put myself. I just updated recently because i feel do bad not updating. For now,im working really hard in laying out every detail/event.

Now that you mentioned it, the characterization is not too strong. I hve to take note of that too. I had this idea of making joongki mysterious, to the point that i will refrain from using his pov as much as possible. But i think that his character might become too dull if i do that. Well the use of mediums by angels,of why they use them instead of ppearing as themselves will be pointed out later on :-) for now, i might unintentionally give spoilers haha.

2/3