Hand Sanitiser
Exoplosion: Reviews and Beta Reading [HIRING]Story: Hand Sanitiser
Author: marmalody
Status: Completed
Characters: Tao & Kris
Rated? No
Summary: - Bit too long... Mind giving me a less than 30 word one?
Title
To be honest, I don't think your title was all that eye catching... If I was looking through the list of fanfiction, I don't think I'd click on yours. It's really hard to interpret what the story would be about by just glancing at your title. All I knew was that it most definitely did not sound like a cliche hopeless love story. Although once I finished the actual story, I realized why you had picked this particular title. It really does fit your fanfiction quite well, and it actually plays a big part in the piece of writing.
Foreword/ Description
Again, in all honesty, I thought the forword confused me.
1. It was really repetitve. When I read it, I kind of tilted my head in confusion because I thought it was a little awkward to read.
Section 1: Tao Hates germs. He hates every little thing about them and so everywhere he goes, Tao carries a protective bottle of hand sanitiser.
Section 2: Why does he take one everywhere? Because germs are everywhere.
The two sections are saying the exact same thing, but in different wording. I personally don't think it's needed to do that. The beginning of section 2 asked the question that was just answered in section 1, and then answered it again...
2. I don't think the words really flow together that well.
Tao doesn't like to touch anything without it. He doesn't like to touch and he doesn't like to be touched.
Why? Because people have germs and if they touch Tao, their germs will stick to him! Tao hates
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