Starlight

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It was our love. It's love to me

Goodbye. Even If I couldn't have you my love was blocked by the inpenatrable wall.

Foreword

So I was listening to Shinee's Quasimodo. This came upon me. It's just a small drabble but I geuss it could pass as a narrative. I hope everyone that reads this likes it. 

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namzUd #1
Chapter 1: "Your death was another arrow, only that you couldn’t remove it for me anymore"
I loved this line! :D. Your writing seems very heart felt coz there were a few other lines I liked. However, I felt the paragraphs were a bit short although you do have a good mix of both long and short sentences. You can try expanding on some of what you wrote about in your paragraphs, I guess coz right now I dont really know much about the characters. You can try reading the " the fault in our stars" by John Green for inspiration.
Oh and another thing, I didnt get these lines:
"When the stars start to rain, it isn’t like my endless tears" What do you mean the stars are raining? How is it relevant?didnt get the metaphor/imagery of this.
"I let your heart be donated to someone" Someone?Who?god?
Just feedback, since you asked for it. I hope you keep writing and improving :D. Don't let anyone stop you from doing that. Good Luck:)
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