Chapter 1: Great :) need to add the episode. Just my opinion i love if u can make hayoung called "yuri sunbae". Maybe next episode u can make the love scene in the car when rain come with the rainy drop on front mirror car the love scene happen. Hayoung want to stop there relationship in the car when she try to get out yuri grab her hand.(yuri:Is raining outside where are you going. Hayoung:You cant stop me our relationship is over) then the scene happen when yuri grab hayoung wrist and pull hayoung to her lips.Just my opinion, cause i have some idea, but im not confident with my writing story and how to make the story more interesting. Hope you will continue yulyong fanfics more. Hwaiting! :)
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