Chapter 1: This concept is interesting, in my opinion. It's almost poetic too! Though if you don't mind me speaking of certain things, then proceed in reading this comment.
I felt that sometimes, you forgot to insert the past tense version of a word. Example-wise, in this sentence (... we have left unsolve.), it would have been (... we have left unsolved.). I left the (...) to indicate the earlier sentence, eh. Also, in this one. In my opinion, the sentence (Your hand that once holding mine has now been touch by millions of people.) would have been more proper like this (Your hand that once held mine has now been touched by millions of people.), or something along those lines.
All in all, I really like the last sentence that sums up this story well. I apologize if I have offended you with this comment, because that is never my intent. I just feel that an honest opinion is what you deserve for writing this. Have a nice day now, ^^/
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