Burial Ritual

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AU. Aridia and Sansana have been at war for the last ten years, one that had beeen born from a need for power. Due to the birth of his Uncle's son, Prince Hyukjae is forced to flee south, to escape assassination, where he literally stumbles upon the enemy army. Under a guise, he is accepted into the army lead by a blond captain by the name of Donghae, where he begins to learn that Aridia is not the barbaric country he was taught to believe, but rather one with unique customs and beliefs.

Warnings: Will contain (despite how bad I am at writing it), also character death (it's called Burial Ritual for a reason), and a poor writing style. 

Foreword

Honestly, I had to put this up in order to not delete the story out of frustration. I have it finished, and it's sat in my edit folder for months, but I honestly couldn't stand my writing style from a few months ago and never got around to editing it. About a week ago, I decided to salvage it, and so it shall be posted eventually. Also, I do have it's sequel in process, and an idea for a prequel, though whether or not I actually write those, is still debatable. Anyways, until I actually post the rest of this story, bear with only a small (slightly unedited) glimpse.

 

 

“I say let him fight,” the captain called out, above everyone else. The camp grew quiet and a few whispers were passed around, keeping it from utter silence. “Even if he is Sansanan, he should have a right to fight against his country. I would be the first the join the enemy’s army if Aridia had started to treat us like Sansana is treating their people.”

“If the captain says let him fight, then I will to,” said one of the soldiers and similar agreements sounded from the crowd.

“Have any armor, kid, or a sword?” asked a tall, busty blonde woman, who looked to be in her late thirties.

“I have a sword,” I said, pointing to the simple blade at my hip, thinking it should have been obvious to her, “ As for armor, I only have this bag,” I said as I shook my head, and lifted the bag that held bread, cheese, fruit and some dried meat.

“Anyone have any spares that might fit the kid?” she called out to the other soldiers. Some shuffled around and others headed into the tents, and after testing the fit of different pieces, I was dressed in an almost complete set of armor. The captain stepped forward and handed me the missing piece, a helmet.

“Welcome to the Aridian army, Eunhyuk."

 

 

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park_jinchan
#1
Chapter 5: all i can say is this story is amazing!!!!! :D
cj041586
#2
Chapter 4: WOW! That was a AWESOME story..I cried when Donghae died and also when Hyukjae did too but at least before he did he saved the kingdom and they both are together again for eternity<33333333333333333
Tengyue268 #3
Chapter 5: a great story^^ I will still wish for both to be alive and happy though...
CookieBear16
#4
Chapter 4: Wow, this story was everything I wished by the title it would be. It was so. . . . UGH, I can't even explain! I swear if I wrote a review on this story it would probably be one of the longest of my life. xDD
I loved the ending. It was perfect. The drama. It was perfect. The action. It was perfect. The friendships and the love. It was perfect. The story was just perfect.
Seriously, thanks for the amazing story. :)
milekaa
#5
Chapter 5: Can't. Comment. Because. Of. Tears. ;A;
This was one amazing story, to say the least! Thanks for sharing! I'll anticipate the sequel, if you ever feel like writing it!
Thanks again *bows* :3
Kuro-Tenshi
#6
Chapter 4: This is so beautiful! I almost cry when Donghae found out that Hyukjae was the prince. But when Donghae died... there is where i cried like a baby! I couldn't belive. Anyway it's the best story i had ever read. I really would like that this FF where a long one, but it's perfect with only 4 chapters. Please continue writing, this was really awesome!
CraZyDreamer_lord #7
Chapter 4: UWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA T-T can't stop crying.Love the story but I would have prefered them to life in the real world together rather then living together in the afterlife.Thank u though for allowing them to be together for as long as they are together then its all fine.
EunHaeLove42 #8
Chapter 4: OMG I love this FF i mean i really really Love it.There is truly nothing i can say bad about this FF *NOTHING*!!!!!!! This has to be one of the best FF ever hands down.I cried, laughed,smiled and cried some more.BRAVO!!!!!! Love u so much for this. :) <3
AyaniELF
#9
Chapter 4: Oh my god. I cannot believe you would even call this poor!

This is hands down the BEST short story I've ever read and trust me I've read a lot. Your attention to details, the dialogue: Everything was perfect. Especially the description of the ritual had me biting my nails.

So amazing how everything flowed perfectly. How different the two countries were. And I loved each character's personality, specifically Donghae's. How tragic his life had been, but how much redemption he held for Hyukjae, Sungmin and Yesung, given his status as Captain.

Not to mention the love between Donghae and Hyukjae. It was so raw and passionate. When Donghae died and Hyukjae did the ritual for him, I had to grab my pillow and bite it. Even now I'm crying while writing this. It was as if I were Hyukjae, that I could feel his pain. And then Hyuk died and they were reunited. No, just no. My feels were already through the roof and then that. Even before he even died! The fact that he asked Yesung to do it cause he already knew and then when it happened, he accepted it. Plus Yesung's background; how admirable.

I can't. I can't. You take all the awards, all of them. No crackfic can ever compete with this. Ever.