I love it. Simple and short. Although, I think elaborating the parts MORE where you describe what he/she loves about her/him would be nicer and will bring more visuals on the short story. You would see interactions or something like that. Punctuation too needs an upgrade. Also, expanding your vocabulary will bring the story more deeper (hmmm like it will give an edge). <br />
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I think it's written well. ^^ Hope it helps.
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